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The Summer I Found Myself
December 2, 2010
Summary:
We walked up the boardwalk and a few guys were coming down our way. There were three of them and they were our age, maybe a little bit older. When we got ready to pass them one of them stopped smiling and asked “Did it hurt?” I looked at him confused and asked “Did what hurt?”
“When you fell from heaven?” My face blushed immediately and Shelly started laughing so hard that I couldn’t help but join in.
“I’m Ayden, and this Jason and Carson.” The guy with the pickup like said.
Shelly stepped forward and introduced us.
“Where are you headed?” Ayden asked.
“To the restaurant down there.” I replied.
“Well, we were heading up to the beach, maybe we will see you around?” he smiled down at me and I replied “Yea, sure.”
Anonymous
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PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 9:54 pm
Okay I will, what's the name of your book?
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Apr. 1 2011 at 11:14 pm
Thanks. Im working on a new book called Under the Summer Sky about a girl who falls in love with another girl. I think you might like it.
ThisIsRivera SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2011 at 6:08 pm
Let me start by saying i really enjoy this im not done yet though :) I really liked the summary i found it really inviting but chapter one made me kind of loose intrest but i kept reading and i definetly think it got a bit better keep writing you re really good!!!!!check out my book so far and tell me if you like it at all :)
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:25 am
Thanks for the tips. I am currently trying to smooth out the kinks but I am also working on another title making my time a little bit cramped.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:23 am
I agree about the choppy sentences but I think if you gave it a chance you will really enjoy it. I am writing another story where I am developing the charaters more thoroughly. Thanks for the tips.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:21 am
Thank you. it means a lot.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Mar. 24 2011 at 12:21 am
I def am writing another book. The one I have going for me now thats uo on this site is Under the Summer Sky. I think everyone will enjoy it as much as they enjoyed this one.
AbbyOliver6 BRONZE said...
on Mar. 23 2011 at 4:14 pm
LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AprilSunshine BRONZE said...
on Mar. 19 2011 at 8:49 pm
Oh my gosh... This story is amazing! I cried! Keep writing!
ColorMeScarlet BRONZE said...
on Mar. 16 2011 at 7:28 pm
I think your story is really nice, and I was drawn in with the summary. However, as soon as I started reading Chapter one, I had to stop. It was really choppy, turning me off to reading it completely.
But I think, if you lengthen your sentences, it would be even better.
drmstarlet21 GOLD said...
on Mar. 11 2011 at 10:46 am
I agree that you should work on the flow and the errors. It being in one of the tops spots, I thought I would be hooked more than I am. I really like your story, I just feel like I am not getting into it. Once you smooth out the choppiness, I am sure I will become more engaged.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2011 at 6:25 pm
Oh yea and it's finished. lol.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Feb. 18 2011 at 3:41 pm
Yupp, I got lazy and decided to screw trying to make it perfect. It's the first book I ever wrote so w/e. Think what you may but My friends and family love it.
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Feb. 12 2011 at 7:06 pm
Yea, thanks. I kind of hit a rough patch while writing but Im also trying to finish it. Because of the amount of comments I got concerning the typo's and punc. mistakes I wanted to go back and edit before publishing it.
PerfectMGymnast DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 11 2011 at 11:43 pm
i enjoyed reading this! once i stared reading the firsr chapter i was hooked and did not stop reading!! i hope to see more chapers from you soon! your an amazing writier!!! :)
literaryaddict PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 2 2011 at 7:36 pm
You have a really great start here. It would be a lot easier to read if you edited it and worked on the grammar and flow; right now, it's a little choppy and the grammar problems sometimes detract from the story. Fix those things, and this story will go from good to awesome!
ANYAtheGREAT<3 said...
on Jan. 31 2011 at 5:24 pm
I am so in love with the charactes in this book. This was one of the first books I've found on here that I actually liked. You deserve that Number 1 spot for sure. Finish it and you never know, you might just make it. Btw, Congrats on doing such a great job. I would love to read some of your other stuff too. Check out my work. But seriously, I love it, Juss saying .
PrincessSparkle GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 2:49 pm
I definantly am. I am working on a couple chapters at the moment.
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