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Death Has Its Heart in the Right Place

March 14, 2009
By Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Looking down the barrel of a gun is a strange feeling, but after staring into Death's dark face so many times, Jack had become accustomed to the tickles and prickles that run across your spine. It had become a familiar, a common, an ordinary feeling. He almost liked it, the sensation, of Death looming about, waiting for the perfect moment to strike. To him, it was intoxicating. It made his heart race, his blood pump and adrenaline run. It was like being in love for the first time, and the last. Yet every time that the Reaper swung his scythe on the mob boss, he always seemed to stop, never finishing the job. It was as though he, Death, took pleasure in seeing Jack sweat under his blade. They both enjoyed the mad thrill, but it seemed that this would be the last time they would saviour it.
Bang! The thunderous roar of the gun shattered the calm night. It was over.
'Here. You can keep it,' the assassin tossed the smoking gun onto Jack's cold lap.
A sinister smile cut the killer's face. Raising his chin proudly, as a young boy does after winning a prize, the mercenary turned around slowly, savouring his victory. Now all he had to do was collect his pay and live comfortably on some exotic island for the rest of his life, without worries, without problems, without necessities, without ' Bang! A second shot.
The assassin's knees broke under the pain. One moment he was savouring glory and the next he was savouring the bitter sweet taste of warm steel, the killer kiss of a bullet. On all fours, he lifted his trembling hand up to his chest: his shirt was soaked in blood that was spewing out on both sides of his trunk. He was cold, weak, in pain. Frozen sweat poured down his face as his insides burnt in anguish.
Writhing on the floor with no strength at all, he turned around to see who the shooter was. Behind him, sitting in the same leather-cushion seat he had been sitting when the assassin came in, Jack sat. The only difference was that now his right arm was outstretched with his fingers curled around the gun. His eyelids were heavy upon his red eyes, but he still maintained them wide open.
'No ' Impossible ' I shot you ' I shot you in the heart.'
Jack licked his lips and explained slowly, enjoying every word, 'I am dextrocardi-ac.'


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on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:42 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

Oh, Okay! I get it! This is an EXCELLENT piece of writing, so PLEASE write more! The ending was GREAT!

on Sep. 27 2010 at 7:41 pm
Dragonscribe BRONZE, West Lafayette, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"A Person's a Person no Matter how Small"
and
"A Rose by Any Other Name Would Smell as Sweet"
and
"God helps those who help themselves"

I loved this, but the end confused me, and the dialogue was puzzling. Dextrocardiac? Please respond about this because I really want to know. I think i'm just missing something here - I don't think it's your flaw or anything.

Bethi SILVER said...
on Sep. 18 2010 at 11:23 am
Bethi SILVER, Winston, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Every soul is a poem" -Michael Franti

haha i like the pun in the title(:

on Sep. 11 2010 at 8:51 pm
Creative and cautivating. Wonderful final.

on Sep. 7 2010 at 3:15 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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I'm happy you liked it! Thanks for commenting

on Sep. 6 2010 at 4:36 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Glad you enjoyed it! Dextrocardiac is a rare heart condition where the heart is on the right side of the body instead of the left (that is why the bullet did not kill him). Thanks for your comment!

LASwan SILVER said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 3:09 pm
LASwan SILVER, Yukon, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Don't worry about the world endng today. It's already tomorrow in Australia.
-Charles Schultz

VERY impressive twist at the end. The first paragraph i simply brilliant. Keep it it!

on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:04 am
sleepingsoundly BRONZE, Unknown, Massachusetts
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i meant jack* oops

on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:03 am
sleepingsoundly BRONZE, Unknown, Massachusetts
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what does "dextrocardi-ac" mean?

that was awesome! it left many questions: why did the assassin want to kill jack? who was jake/the assassin? why was jack suicidal.

i loved the detail! keep writing =]


on Sep. 5 2010 at 7:32 pm
Andy Binker Cosen BRONZE, Buenos Aires, Other
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Thanks!   

on Sep. 5 2010 at 7:29 pm
rachelnicole GOLD, Arlington, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Maybe My Heart Really Didn't Skip A Beat....And Maybe The Twinkle In Your Eye Was The Sun Reflecting Weird, And Maybe The Feeling In My Stomach Was Just Not Having Enough For Breakfast...And Maybe I just Thought It Was Love"

impressive

abcd said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 3:32 pm
i liked what you wrote so much that i will have to read it.

ringo * said...
on Aug. 16 2010 at 7:53 pm
I'd like it!

on Aug. 16 2010 at 7:52 pm

Very impressive.

*****


Jon P said...
on Aug. 16 2010 at 9:39 am
Dear Andy, great thriller with an unexpected ending. Are you and your sister committed to pursue a career in science? I also enjoyed very much the videos you did with mjbc99. "Thanks to Science", "Science is the answer" & "Science is the Key to the Answer" defiently show in 90 seconds the different angles of SCIENCE, "Bricks of Knowledge" absolutely conveys the message, "Greek Legacy" is fun and educational and "Play Back" has an elegant, clean and fresh sense of humor.

Belen said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 10:27 am
A great twist with an excellent punch.

Tommy said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 10:25 am
Enjoyed much.

MaBea said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 5:28 pm
Well done.

Coki said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 6:56 am
Fully agree with El I Nes

El I Nes said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:37 am
Excellent thriller. Also I watched your videos very well done. Being a Clinical Investigator and Gastroenterology Professor I really appreciate what you have done regarding science in general and Medicine in particular. "Thanks to Science" is simple but powerful, "Bricks of Knowledge" absolutely conveys the message, "Greek Legacy" is fun and educational and "Play Back" has an elegant, clean and fresh sense of humor, it is really fun.