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So She Drank

January 26, 2014
By xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Give me strength when I'm standing, and faith when I fall."


She rises with the sun as the golden beams maliciously promise her a better day.
Her mind pounded like drums,
Flooded back blurry memories from the night before.
They danced,
And she drank.
They hugged,
And she drank.
They kissed,
And she drank.
They didn't care,
So she drank.
They were everywhere and she couldn't escape.
He mind tried to leave,
But her body was useless.
Trapped on the dirty bar stool.
But she didn't care,
So she drank.
She drank her fears and her hate.
She drank her anger and her frustration.
She drank her way into the streets.
She drank her way into his unscrupulous bed.
She falls with the sun as the silver dust of moonlight settles coldly on the night.



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on Jan. 31 2014 at 2:01 pm
Samantha_Lynn_Burke SILVER, Jefferson, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
Always do what you're afraid to do

Anytime! Glad to help! :)

on Jan. 29 2014 at 11:11 pm
xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give me strength when I'm standing, and faith when I fall."

Hey, thanks! I'll be sure to check it out.

on Jan. 29 2014 at 11:11 pm
xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give me strength when I'm standing, and faith when I fall."

Oh my gosh. Wow. That made my night. Thank you! I wrote this for my creative writing class and the prompt was to end with that line, so that's how that happened. But I definitely see what you mean!

on Jan. 29 2014 at 11:09 pm
xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give me strength when I'm standing, and faith when I fall."

Thank you so much! Now that I look at it more I am seeing a lot of things I could have changed. Thank you so much, you're so sweet! :)

on Jan. 29 2014 at 4:20 pm
CaptainAubby BRONZE, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"You must write every single day of your life…You must lurk in libraries and climb the stacks like ladders to sniff books like perfumes and wear books like hats upon your crazy heads….may you be in love every day for the next 20,000 days. And out of that love, remake a world." -Ray Bradbury

I love it, it's one of my new favorites. I think you could have stopped at the second to last line, but that doesn't make me love it any less.

JLEIGH96 GOLD said...
on Jan. 29 2014 at 10:08 am
JLEIGH96 GOLD, Corydon, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Everyone is a genius, but if you judge a fish on its ability to climb it will live its entire life believing it is stupid. -Albert Einstein

I love this it is truly a good poem. You should check out MOM by me.

on Jan. 29 2014 at 7:53 am
Samantha_Lynn_Burke SILVER, Jefferson, Maine
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Always do what you're afraid to do

You're welcome and yes I do have advice. Sometimes, poetry can take some time and patience to write.  You might even have to come back to it once you have found out what more to write on it.  It could take days or even weeks, but more time gives the poem more emotion and quality! Even I have poetry that I could have spent more time on.  I have some really cruddy (probably spelt that wrong) poems, but I could always go back and critique them! :)

on Jan. 27 2014 at 8:31 pm
xofelicia97 GOLD, Saint Mary&#39s, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give me strength when I'm standing, and faith when I fall."

Thank you! Yeah, I struggled with this a lot. Do you have any advice for me?

on Jan. 27 2014 at 9:47 am
Samantha_Lynn_Burke SILVER, Jefferson, Maine
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Always do what you're afraid to do

Very good poem, but it seems like you just stopped short, like I feel like there should be more of an ending.