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Outside

March 11, 2010
By Kbuschan PLATINUM, South Plainfield, New Jersey
Kbuschan PLATINUM, South Plainfield, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Fall in love or fall in hate; Get inspired or be depressed; Ace a test or flunk a class; Make babies or make art; Speak the truth or lie and cheat; Dance on tables or sit in the corner; Life is divine chaos. Embrace it. Breathe. And enjoy the ride...


I stepped outside in the cold of the night./
Goosebumps slowly appeared as I got cold./
The sky was a calm blue with streaks of light./
To go outside in a t-shirt was bold./
The next day it snowed and outside I went./
As it was falling, I felt a soft blow./
I walked on it and my steps made a dent./
It was cold, but I did not want to go./
The weather is worse, so no more outside./
My adventures are over; it's so sad./
This makes my day awful; I want to hide./
When it gets warmer I will be so glad./
So until that season comes back to me,/
I will be inside drinking some hot tea./


The author's comments:
I was inspired by my experience being outside one night.

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on Jan. 1 2011 at 4:59 pm
Kbuschan PLATINUM, South Plainfield, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Fall in love or fall in hate; Get inspired or be depressed; Ace a test or flunk a class; Make babies or make art; Speak the truth or lie and cheat; Dance on tables or sit in the corner; Life is divine chaos. Embrace it. Breathe. And enjoy the ride...

haha yeh i guess it is cute

on Jan. 1 2011 at 1:59 am
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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&quot;Don&#039;t punish yourself,&quot; she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing.&quot;<br /> --Markus Zusak, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

I like that, it's cute. Yes, I called your poem cute. The middle was magical. The end was *cute*. The beginning, well, you used cold on both the first and the second line and it doesn't sound right. Maybe "cool" and something more descriptive for the one describing goosebumps. Other than that, good.