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My Mommy is MIA

March 2, 2012
By loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-


I do not remember your smile,
I don't recall your voice.
I can not reach you,
even if i travel many a mile.
You have been gone for so long.
I thought for the longest time,
that one day you would back,
but time have proved that I am wrong.
You were my all,
my life, my breath, my soul.
Then you were gone.
No warning, not a single goodbye call.
I was so small,
just five years old.
the tears I have cried,
could drown you all.
Year after long year,
I have been waiting, for this pain to ease.
The only thing that even starts to help, is an ice cold beer.
I know it's not right,
I know I'm underage.
But nothing else will make it possible,
for me to sleep through the night.
I do remember your sweet touch,
and your bittersweet love.
I do remember the woman,
that I treasure so much.


The author's comments:
I wrote this on the nine year anniversary of my beloved mother being dead. It helped me no feel so awful and be in so much pain.

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on Jan. 29 2014 at 8:45 pm
TopHatCactus BRONZE, League City, Texas
4 articles 1 photo 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
When writing a novel a writer should create living people; people not characters. A character is a caricature.
Ernest Hemingway

I want to say I'm sorry, but I have nothing to appoligize for. I will say in my deepest regards that I wish you well. Lossing things in general is hard for anyone, but to loss something as caring and loving and important as a family member is even worse. It makes your character as a person stronger to survive something like this. Sorry if this came to you as rude, but I mean the best. Sometimes the greatest come out of us at the worst of times. I wish you luck in your future writing expirences!

on Feb. 27 2013 at 10:37 am
IndigoElisabeth SILVER, Woodbury, New Jersey
5 articles 1 photo 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
John 1:1

Awww. So sad. Really good, though!

on Feb. 26 2013 at 9:50 am
SteelersJdog GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Wow, what a beautiful poem. I love the heart and soul that you poured out into this. I can definitely tell that this came from the heart.

on Sep. 25 2012 at 8:46 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

its not a problem. I love reminding people that she is not something you want to lose  

Dynamo DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 4 2012 at 4:24 am
Dynamo DIAMOND, Lahore, Other
54 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
I used to think falling in love would be personal. But it's all a big public show.

The emotions suffuse through you as you read this poem. Beautiful and full of emotions. I am so sorry for your mother. Our relation with that personage is often tenuous, yet deep inside all of us know that she is the most prized gift we can ever hope to possess. As the poet said, tears of sorrow can never be wiped away. And here is a piece of advice for you, don't take any anti-depressant(like the one you mentioned). They cause inebriety and can very well cause serious disorders. This poem really affected me. All I can say is: thanks for reminding me.

on May. 23 2012 at 9:31 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

This is lovely, and I'm sorry for your loss. Ps. Pleaz check out my work, thx

on May. 14 2012 at 10:07 pm
TheWeirdPoet SILVER, LExington, Kentucky
5 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
I think people forget that humans are animals too.

Truly saddening. I've read poems as if they were depressing, but I just see this as sadness, horrible sadness. The sense of losing one so close, and being so young where the emotional connection means most, it truly saddening. I feel the dreadful emotion that is expressed in this poem. That is all a good thing, you've done a very well job writing this.

butterfly123 said...
on Apr. 12 2012 at 10:00 am
butterfly123, Banglore, Other
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hey! beautiful poem! it is so sad and you made it a point to inculcate that feeling in the reader. the poem is very fluid,which i like a lot. i can't imagine how hard it must be for you. i'm extremly sorry for your loss. anyway, great work and keep writing XD!

on Mar. 23 2012 at 3:16 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 351 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Your emotion is very strong. I love how your poetry is absolutely real. I'm sorry about your mom. I can't imagine the pain. All I can say is that she's watching over you and I don't even know you, but I'm sure you are making her proud. I can tell by the way you write.                         When I write all of my poems are real, but I make up a story to show the point I'm trying to make. I'm kind of masking my emotion. Your writing is different than mine in that way, and it's really cool. If I were going to change anything about (just for some good critique) I would somehow reword the line The only thin that even starts to help, is an ice cold beer. I think it would be fairly easy to make that line shorter so that it doesn't mess with the flow of the poem as much. I really love the rhyming in the stanzas. It's a quiet touch. The rhyming isn't a focal point, but it makes it flow better. I LOVE this poem. Great job!!

on Mar. 19 2012 at 7:26 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Awe:) You made me smile too! Love you too loveissmiles!!

on Mar. 14 2012 at 7:03 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

thank you for the feedback!! :)

Kinzi GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2012 at 8:54 am
Kinzi GOLD, Cairo, Other
11 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
“There is some good in this world, and it's worth fighting for.” -J.R.R. Tolkien

“I have found the paradox, that if you love until it hurts, there can be no more hurt, only more love.” -Mother Teresa

Ahhh.. this hurt. And that's a good thing, it's supposed to hurt. I'm so sorry about your mom. 

I think your poem was the strongest once it got to "I was so small" and continued to the end. At least, that's the part that resonated for me. Really, good job. =]


on Mar. 12 2012 at 7:30 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

No Sunshine, you didn't make me sad, you actually made me smile, becuase i know that you are my friend and you are here for me in my time of pain. Love you sunshine!!

on Mar. 9 2012 at 7:52 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Your welcome loveissmiles..I didn't mean to make you sad if I did..

on Mar. 9 2012 at 7:30 am
loveissmiles GOLD, Lynn, Indiana
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I live for the nights I can't remember with the people I will never forget." -Carassisa M-<3

"What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve." -Softball Coach Steve B-

I listened to it, and i loved it. Thank you. Sunshine...thanks darling. I'm working on getting over it.

on Mar. 9 2012 at 12:56 am
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
16 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

You have my deepest condolences. Losing people is hard, and it changes who a person is forever. BTW...I know this is sort of off topic, but...listen to the song "May It Be" by Enya. You'll love it, it speaks directly to this type of thing. 

on Mar. 8 2012 at 8:45 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Im so sorry I didn't know your mom passed..This is a sad poem, a great poem too. Your wording is amazing! That would be something hard to get over..Everythings going to be ok though..

on Mar. 8 2012 at 8:45 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Im so sorry I didn't know your mom passed..This is a sad poem, a great poem too. Your wording is amazing! That would be something hard to get over..Everythings going to be ok though..