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Traitor

August 12, 2014
By ORIanna SILVER, Lowell, North Carolina
ORIanna SILVER, Lowell, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't love someone because their looks, or their clothes, or for their fancy car, but because they sing a song only you can hear." -Oscar Wilde


I feel miserable.
Everyday it's worst.
And I can't help but feel guilty.
I just want to crawl.
Burn my stomach on the concrete.
End up in a hole.
I wish to stay in the hole until death.
I don't want to wait long.
Because in all reality,
I want to die.
Never thought that I will feel like this.
I just want to die.
Burn my body and scatter it.
Scatter it on that traitor.
I hope my ashes burn him to the ground.
I hope they get into his lungs so he can feel what I feel.
I just want this.


The author's comments:
It was an expression towards someone who makes you feel bad.

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ORIanna SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2014 at 2:54 am
ORIanna SILVER, Lowell, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't love someone because their looks, or their clothes, or for their fancy car, but because they sing a song only you can hear." -Oscar Wilde

Thanks and I appreciate your criticism (:

ORIanna SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2014 at 2:52 am
ORIanna SILVER, Lowell, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You don't love someone because their looks, or their clothes, or for their fancy car, but because they sing a song only you can hear." -Oscar Wilde

Thanks and I appreciate your criticism (:  

on Aug. 24 2014 at 9:34 pm
GonzaloTovilla BRONZE, Richardson, Texas
1 article 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In writing, you must kill all your darlings?"
-William Faulkner

Wow. Pretty powerful stuff. It expresses lots of feelings. Now, i like to give constructive criticism instread of just praise so pardon my intrusion. The only thing i would recommend you is to maybe add more ajectives or metaphors, but if what you are aiming for is simplicity, it's gold then.