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An Eternal Battle

July 8, 2014
By KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
9 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.


The mind, she stays cool,
Calm, composed
Like a still, still sea
Incessantly churning within its depths
The mind calculates.

The heart, he rages
Laughs, cries of joy
Wearing himself on his sleeve
The heart yearns feeling
Like oxygen.

And they fight.
Mind poisons Heart
Deceives him, undoes him.
Heart strangles Mind,
Whips her, throws her.

And the eternal battle continues
While they are encased in a body
Opposite poles, held together
One pulls towards the sky
The other towards the ground
And thus, we move on forward.


The author's comments:
We are governed by our hearts as well as our mind; but they are often in conflict. I enjoyed personifying them; thinking of the techniques that they would use to put each other down, and come out on top. Contradictory though they are, we need this conflict to help through the walk of life, and this is what I wanted to depict through the last line of the poem.

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on Jun. 12 2015 at 1:24 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Very interesting personification. I like the contrasting roles you gave them, and I couldn't help but smile when I noticed that you made the brain feminine. I tripped a little over the two lines "The heart yearns/ feeling like oxygen." I'm still not sure what it means. But there were other points that I did like. I liked the simplicity of the phrases, and the clipped language. I think it aptly captures the stress of the two wrestling parts. The closing line, "And thus, we move forward" brought it together well, reminding the reader that this battle isn't all bad. I wasn't sure if it was supposed to mean that the struggle moves us forward, or that we move forward in constant struggle, but either one, I feel, applies. Thank you for inviting me to read your poem. Write on!

on Mar. 18 2015 at 8:11 pm
itsyourmaingirl SILVER, Flint, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Show me a family of readers and I will show you the people who will change the world.

This is such a great poem! It is so relatable and I really enjoyed it.

on Feb. 5 2015 at 6:06 pm
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
7 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated" By- Dr. Maya Angelou

I can relate to this. I feel like this is my mind and heart everyday.

on Jan. 14 2015 at 8:13 pm
MysticMusic ELITE, Waterloo, Other
116 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You only live once, but if you do it right, once is enough.” -Mae West
"It had long since come to my attention that people of accomplishment rarely sat back and let things happen to them. They went out and happened to things." - Leonardo Da Vinci

This has perfectly described practically every single person I know, including myself. The separate personalities of the mind and the heart were depicted very well here and it was enjoyable to read. Great job!

on Jan. 11 2015 at 3:40 pm
itsyourmaingirl SILVER, Flint, Texas
7 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Show me a family of readers and I will show you the people who will change the world.

I really enjoyed reading this. Everyone line was amazing and the whole poem just fit so well together. Good work!

on Sep. 13 2014 at 1:25 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

The imagery is fascinating! I love the way you ersonified the heart and the mind, it was an interesting way to talk about them. This is a very enjoyable piece, and I am looking forward to reading he next one! Great job :P)

on Sep. 12 2014 at 2:28 pm
Gabrielleamar GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 16 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Le vent se lève il faut tanter de vivre" –Paul Valèry

Great job! You used explicit imagery to express your ideas and successfully personified the heart and the mind. I especially enjoyed the fact that you gave the organs genders, as though you are truly telling the story of a heterosexual relationship. However, the piece may be missing something. Perhaps define the irony a bit more, but all and all this is a great work of art!

on Jul. 17 2014 at 8:04 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

WOW and SO GOOD. So emotional and just AMAZING!!! Keep on writing!!! Thank you, for sharing this!

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 17 2014 at 12:18 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 523 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

This is so cool! I've never read any like this, personafying these two things in are body. That's the thing - every one can relate to this! I loved it :)

on Jul. 17 2014 at 12:05 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

an intricate piece wrought with emotion, great job^^

on Jul. 16 2014 at 10:28 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Very personal and thoguht provoking! Keep up the great work! o^_^o

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 3:09 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

I love this!

--Em-- GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 11:37 am
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
15 articles 0 photos 32 comments
Amazing. Completely amazing. Amazingly amazing.

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2014 at 6:22 pm
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments
W.O.W. Beautiful.  Great poem!

jaypeg BRONZE said...
on Jul. 15 2014 at 12:23 pm
jaypeg BRONZE, New York, New York
3 articles 1 photo 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Keep your mind in the present and your faith in the future.

Wow this was so empowering and I thought provoking!