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Darkness

January 7, 2014
By RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner


I didn't think that leaving you
Would have affected me so much.

It had all ended in a bang,
Glass on the carpet
From the glass you threw
Over that time that I went over
The budget by ten dollars.

Your eyes has been so bright
And I had still thought
That they were beautiful
Even though they were
Stained with a darkness,
The darkness that had been with
You since childhood.

That darkness had followed you
Around and exposed itself briefly
Around friends and family.
It would punch holes in walls,
Kick over chairs,
Shove me against doors,
And scream in my face.

Every time the darkness was around,
I felt like my heart would burst,
That the tears would melt my eyes,
And worse,
That maybe your hand would find
My throat
And try to choke the right words
Out.

I left on a sunny day but
That didn't stop me from
Crying on the subway
Or fear for my life when I was
Within five miles of your house.

I saw your face on every
Person that I talked to.
I saw your face in traffic signals,
The moon when it was just
A sliver,
And in the inky black
Of an unlit alley.

I feel the fear whenever
I take a step outside.
I feel the fear when I know
That someone is behind me.
It's because I was given a curse
When I walked out that door.
I can now see the darkness in
Every single person I meet
And I will never be able to shake
The feeling that you're just around the
Corner but this time
With a gun.

You said that if I ever
Stopped loving you that
You'd kill me with a slight smile
As your fingers were entwined with
My own.

I haven't stopped loving
You
But I know that you will come.
One day.



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on Feb. 7 2014 at 6:47 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

on Feb. 7 2014 at 10:00 am
SymphonyLaine BRONZE, Aurora, Illinois
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Beautiful! I could feel the emotion in the story. You definitely have a way with words! I especially enjoyed "I saw your face" paragraph.  Overall very well written !

on Feb. 4 2014 at 7:23 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Yeah, the rhythm is off and I'll try to fix that in my spare time. Thank you!

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 3 2014 at 10:33 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Overall, I liked the idea of the poem and the message it sent. Very powerful, however I believe the rythm is a bit off, but good job!

on Feb. 3 2014 at 7:01 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you!

on Feb. 3 2014 at 7:01 am
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you! I'm so glad that you liked it!

on Feb. 2 2014 at 3:29 pm
author_musical PLATINUM, Torrington, Wyoming
27 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sweetie, if you're going to be two faced, at least make one of them pretty. - Marilyn Monroe

Interesting. I loved it. There is no way to describe how much I truly liked this. Maybe 'amazing' , or 'wow' . No words. None. Just going in my favorites now...

on Feb. 2 2014 at 12:18 am
LordHelen SILVER, Lompoc, California
9 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is the time you will never get back and tomorrow is the next yesterday."

Wow. This has impact. I like the last paragraph, that they haven't stopped loving. And how the first sentence hits you with what the poem is about. This whole thing impresses me. I can only say 'wow' because that covers it as much as any word. Really, wow.

on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:57 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you!

on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:57 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:56 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you!

on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:56 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

I'm sorry that you're going through this with other people. :( thank you for the comment and stay strong!

on Jan. 31 2014 at 4:55 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Thank you so much!

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jan. 30 2014 at 5:41 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

I like how the first sentence of the poem just hits you with what the poem is about. just enchantingly beautiful <3

Alycia. BRONZE said...
on Jan. 26 2014 at 9:45 pm
Alycia. BRONZE, Lower Gwynedd, Pennsylvania
4 articles 8 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Our lives are not our own. We are bound to others, past and present, and by each crime and every kindness, we birth our future.” -- David Mitchell, Cloud Atlas

This poem, which is beautifully well-written, gave me chills. You definitely have a talent for poems. Keep up the good work! :)

on Jan. 26 2014 at 3:32 pm
theblondechick GOLD, Kingsport, Tennessee
14 articles 0 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
I want to live and feel all the shades, tones, and variations of mental and physical experience possible in life.
And I am horribly limited.
-Sylvia Path

I loved this! I especially liked the 3rd stanza. What I like aout this is that I think everyone can find something they can relate to. We all have a darknes we're trying to hide from. It used some very imagery.

mnm08 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2014 at 8:12 pm
mnm08 BRONZE, Grande Prairie, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A writer needs the industry of an ant, the creativity of a kitten and the hid of an armadillo."- Author Unknown

I actually could relate to your poem a lot. This poem resembles some stuff i'm going through with ppl. I really like it. It was well written, and i liked the vivid imagery. Great Job :)

on Jan. 25 2014 at 11:53 am
Kestrel135 PLATINUM, Waterford, Connecticut
43 articles 0 photos 256 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Respect existence or expect resistance"

This is a really great poem. It relates the forced relationship the character is in perfectly, really, and was fluently devised. I paticularily liked how you drew 'the darkness within you' throughout the poem, following the victim as they ran from the absuer, always fearing the possibility of their paths crossing again. A truly powerful piece of work. Great work!

on Jan. 23 2014 at 8:16 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Wow! Thank you! That is really nice of you to say!

on Jan. 22 2014 at 10:11 pm
cecchmate BRONZE, Menlo Park, California
3 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A society grows great when old men plant trees whose shade they know they shall never sit in."
-Greek proverb

Wow, I really love this poem. It's surprising to me that nothing in particular inspired you to write this, because having dealt with severly abusive people in my past I can seriously, personally relate to a lot of the phrases you have in there, and I think I've actually written them down and/or thought them in my head before. It could probably use a little bit of sprucing up here and there, but all in all, this is a super powerful poem. You should seriously consider looking for domestic violence literature contests and try submitting it. Awesome, awesome, awesome work! :)