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The Extent to Love

December 11, 2013
By JoyMason PLATINUM, Arapahoe, Nebraska
JoyMason PLATINUM, Arapahoe, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
You, he who subdued me, be not insolent, forget not the beauty of virtue.


Living death,
Loving hate.
Giving Shame,
To those who arrive too late.
Dying fire,
Living speak.
Giving leave,
To those who’s souls reek.
Joyous sorrow,
Flowering weed,
The heart that I gave you,
You gave me back,
After it began to bleed.
Shy leader,
Blue red rose,
Leave me,
To someone who knows.
Courageous coward,
Dull shine.
It hurt,
The way you ran,
Your knife down my spine.
Wrong right,
Paying thief.
You’ll never know,
The extent to my grief.



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on Feb. 1 2014 at 6:19 pm
JoyMason PLATINUM, Arapahoe, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
You, he who subdued me, be not insolent, forget not the beauty of virtue.

thanx, i realize that it might b a bit hard to follow it, but i wuz bored and just typing while doing notes in science so...ya thanx again ^w^

on Jan. 29 2014 at 10:29 pm
cecchmate BRONZE, Menlo Park, California
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Favorite Quote:
"A society grows great when old men plant trees whose shade they know they shall never sit in."
-Greek proverb

This is good! I might change the verse 'Joyous sorrow, flowering weed, the heart that I gave you, you gave me back, after it began to bleed' - you have a different rhythm all throughout the poem and it doesn't exactly fit. All in all, though, I think this is a good poem. You might try to clarify your desciptive examples a bit; here and there it gets a bit hard to follow. But otherwise, you have really nice rhythm, and some of your phrases are particularly beautiful.