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Can't Breathe

April 16, 2013
By AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas


ripped from my lungs,
there goes my breath.
torn from my body,
here lies my heart.
i cannot breathe,
i cannot beat.
without air to cleanse my soul
i feel boggy.
weighed down by the past
and bad decisions.
with every breath i breathe
i cleanse my soul,
with every breath i dont
i lose my goals.
without a beat to my heart
sweet blood doesnt rush.
to my cheeks to my hands,
to my rounded ears.
nothing has meaning,
and meaning means nothing.
for my heart cannot beat,
and my lungs not inhale.
im stuck with only
my body and entrails.
my breath and my beat,
my two driving forces.
without them as supports
what is the purpose?
i cant beat
i cant breathe
and i cant seem to care...



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on May. 9 2013 at 11:08 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

thanks so much!!! that really means a lot because this is my fav of mine so im glad that you like it too!!

on May. 9 2013 at 10:54 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Wow. I wish I had words to express how much I love this.........amazing!

on Apr. 20 2013 at 12:24 am
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

thanks i appreciate it. 

on Apr. 18 2013 at 11:07 pm
_betweenthelines_ BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream."- Edgar Allan Poe

Nice work! :)

on Apr. 18 2013 at 10:37 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

ok thanks :)

on Apr. 18 2013 at 10:35 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

The ending is great, but it starts picking up about halfway through. Fix up the rhythm in the top half, and this will go from good to great :)

on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:56 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

thanks :) i try but im not sure if im that good. thanks for reassuring me that im decent :D

on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:54 pm
Potterhead_Is_amazing GOLD, Arvada, Colorado
10 articles 3 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
Happiness can be found even in the darkest of times, so long as one remembers to turn on the light.

Wow.I cant think of anything to say except....that was amazing I can't think of anything else to say!Keep writing,that was great!!!!

on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:02 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

haha thanks :) i think...

on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:41 pm
TheNamesBond....JamesBond BRONZE, Galloway, New Jersey
1 article 4 photos 12 comments
It's absolutely terrible. Keep up the good work, It's GOOD

on Apr. 18 2013 at 8:16 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

haha thank you :) i think this is one of my personal favorites. i think i right better when im mad or upset. happy poems just dont sound good :)

on Apr. 18 2013 at 7:25 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
25 articles 2 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are none so blind as those who refuse to see"

Um what were you saying about not being good??? You are soooooo good....just...amazing. I absolutely LOVE it!!! Good job bestie :)