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Self-Destruction

April 7, 2013
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski


The flames begin,
Licking their fiery wrath up my arms.
I let them come and bid them good morning,
A welcome distraction
From all the pain and the loss of this fine
Mourning.
The pain slips from my fingers in a broken
Way,
As rain slips from the clouds unbidden.
But the tears did not abate
This agony,
And while they, the flames of my shame and dark past,
burned
I stood there, silent
As can be
Awaiting my impending
self-
destruction.


The author's comments:
this isn't any good, my i'm still posting it :P

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on Jun. 4 2013 at 5:48 pm
bethanyebethany BRONZE, Clinton, Tennessee
2 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would love to be made perfect, but instead, I have the grace of God." -Audio Adrenaline

Wow. No Words. Fantastic.

on Jun. 4 2013 at 5:42 pm
LittleLadybird GOLD, Carrickfergus, Other
14 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be nobody but yourself in a world that is trying it's hardest every night and day to change you into everyone else is to fight the hardest battle a human being can fight, and never stop fighting.

I practically shivered when I read "this fine/Mourning"!!! Amazing again Jade, you have such a great talent!!

on May. 12 2013 at 9:48 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Tis UP! and is called Sacred Heartbeat :) I am haaaaappy!!!!!!!

on May. 12 2013 at 1:21 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Jade, Great Job! What do you mean it's not good??? This is great to anyone who reads it, and obviously the editors. Beautiful work Jade. I will go check out your other work now. :) Keep rockin

on May. 12 2013 at 9:39 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thanks guys!! And I'll be sure to check it out when it's up, epic. What would you like me to read, Edison??

on May. 12 2013 at 12:23 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

I didnt have anything in mind, i just lost the book i was reading and needed something good to read. I guess I have a new poem, but its not up yet. It will be a few days.

1299836 said...
on May. 11 2013 at 7:11 pm
1299836, 1299836, California
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i really like the imagery and personification. my favorite part is when you wrote about how the fire licked their wrath up my arms. nice poem! definitely deserved the editors award!

on May. 11 2013 at 6:21 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thanks! I've also realized some of my poems are rather similar, for better or for worse. Good idea about companion pieces! Is there anything you'd like me to comment one for you?

on May. 11 2013 at 4:53 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

You know, it has a similar, dreamy atmosphere to it as your other poem, The Painting. But that one was about creation, and losing yourself in something good. This one is destruction, and losing yourself in mind-numbing pain. 'Tis rather chilling. I actually think they are prrtty good companion peices.

on May. 10 2013 at 8:43 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

haha, thanks, i suppose i just wasn't feeling the rhythm? idk, but thanks so much you're very nice :D

on May. 10 2013 at 7:47 pm
jmitchbb SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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The imagrey in this poem is amazing! How could you say it isn't any good?

on May. 9 2013 at 10:43 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Thank you soooo much!

on May. 9 2013 at 7:27 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 444 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

I love the lines "The flames begin/Licking their fiery wrath up my arms." What an excellent way to begin your poem! I also like how you didn't need rhyming to make the poem stick with your readers; it's amazing without rhymes detracting from its meaning. Great job!

. said...
on Apr. 23 2013 at 7:32 pm
awww that's the nicest thing you've ever said to me XD lol

on Apr. 23 2013 at 5:35 pm
TheNamesBond....JamesBond BRONZE, Galloway, New Jersey
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Jade, you suck. U suck at being bad ;D, good work. Very well written.

KatsK DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 22 2013 at 10:22 pm
KatsK DIAMOND, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Being inexhaustible, life and nature are a constant stimulus for a creative mind.
~Hans Hofmann
You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.
~Ray Bradbury

Jade, I love this. This is so raw and real.

on Apr. 20 2013 at 9:49 pm
TevyRae PLATINUM, Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
24 articles 7 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Here is a small fact: You are going to die." ~The Book Thief
"You have no stupidity inside of your adorable little self." ~Mikey Pasterik

i really like it! i love the choppy yet flowing melody of it. great job! 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 19 2013 at 1:29 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you so much! I love your work! XD

on Apr. 18 2013 at 9:08 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Yah of course I will!!!!!! XD XD

Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 18 2013 at 1:05 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Sorry, to bother you with this; but I saw your profile and I saw you like City of Bones. I wrote a review some time ago. Will you read it? Don't mean to advertise my review, but I want the honest opinion of a fan.