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The Moon and The Sun

November 24, 2011
By augustsun02 SILVER, Hamburg, New Jersey
augustsun02 SILVER, Hamburg, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Write. It doesn't matter if you're overjoyed, furious, miserable, or what. Write to keep those emotions in check while managing to grow stronger.


All was good, bright, and fun when the moon fell in love with the sun
All was right in late June when the sun fell in love with the moon
Then the moon said goodbye as down came the November rain
With tears in her eyes, the sun vowed to never fall in love again



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ReneeB SILVER said...
on Jul. 17 2012 at 1:30 pm
ReneeB SILVER, Milford, Michigan
9 articles 2 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The world needs dreamers and the world needs doers. But above all, the world needs dreamers who do."
~Sarah Ban Breathnach

Very lovely. I love the personification, and the idea of the sun and moon together. Great job! :)

on May. 13 2012 at 6:51 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

That was awesome. I loved it!

KateLA GOLD said...
on Apr. 12 2012 at 5:45 pm
KateLA GOLD, Everett, Washington
11 articles 20 photos 194 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don’t you find it Funny that after Monday(M) and Tuesday(T), the rest of the week says WTF?
-Unknown

This is really creative-it's fun and whimsical, I really like it because I'm into astrology! 5/5!

on Apr. 12 2012 at 9:44 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

I just wish it were a tad longer... I don't know, it feels like you could add a stanza or two to the front. but I like the flow of it, and especially the ending!

on Apr. 4 2012 at 7:53 pm
LittleSully GOLD, Elmwood Park, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The course of true love never did love smooth." William Shakespeare

This is really great, keep up the good work:)