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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Dec. 14 2021 at 9:32 am
GoPanthers1234, Davidson, North Carolina
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I liked the use of figurative language and how the dad made sure that his son couldn't drown.

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on Dec. 13 2021 at 11:12 pm
JulianHoops, Harrisburg, North Carolina
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I enjoy the fact that the father is trying to protect his son from drowning. On the other hand, I was hoping that the dad would allow his son to go deeper in water.

AP2207 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:45 pm
AP2207, Moorsville, North Carolina
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I like the figurative language this poem uses and how it is described. I also liked how you used symbolism through out it.

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on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

sbrooks123 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:36 pm
sbrooks123, Cornelius, North Carolina
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I like how personification was used in this poem.

LiamLingor said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 1:50 pm
LiamLingor, Huntersville, North Carolina
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I like how this poem uses symbolization to show how a dad protects a kid. They let the kid try to do things and in the event, they would've failed, the father has a chain that makes sure they are safe.

on Dec. 2 2021 at 12:50 pm
smaddy24 PLATINUM, Appleton, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
“Light shines brightest in the deepest dark!”
-Jim Butcher

lol, this is still top discussed 13 years later.

on Nov. 18 2021 at 11:46 pm
McLaughlin_It SILVER, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
All my life they let me know
How far I would not go
But inside the beast still grows
Waiting, chewing through the ropes
Who are you to change this world?
Silly boy
No one needs to hear your words
Let it go
Carnivore, carnivore
Won't you come digest me?
Take away everything I am
Bring it to an end

Can somebody explain, i'm confused

on Sep. 8 2021 at 11:18 am
lashhbug05 SILVER, Mumbai, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Cogito ergo sum

Wow this poem is beautiful

camc1_03 said...
on Jun. 11 2021 at 1:05 pm
camc1_03, Mount Olive, New Jersey
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I love the symbolism and descriptions used in the poem. It gives a really good and different perspective of somebody else's life and what it might be like to live as that person.

on May. 24 2021 at 2:59 pm
jbritomariani BRONZE, Aurora, Colorado
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This is really good! The chain was a really good touch and I think especially the rhyme scheme carried through really well. You might still want to expand on the idea of the chain, especially just the sensation of it as you attempt to fly. At the same time I think you did a really good job.

on May. 12 2021 at 7:21 pm
lindsey-liu BRONZE, Redmond, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
The duty of youth is to challenge corruption. - Kurt Cobain

Im speechless, so beautifully articulated..

on Apr. 23 2021 at 11:16 am
McLaughlin_It SILVER, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
All my life they let me know
How far I would not go
But inside the beast still grows
Waiting, chewing through the ropes
Who are you to change this world?
Silly boy
No one needs to hear your words
Let it go
Carnivore, carnivore
Won't you come digest me?
Take away everything I am
Bring it to an end

That's awesome dude, keep up the great work :)

Epi BRONZE said...
on Mar. 29 2021 at 12:58 pm
Epi BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Wow! Great job... keep up the grat work :)

on Mar. 18 2021 at 7:55 am
Anna_993 BRONZE, Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
If life were predictable it would cease to be life, and be without flavor.

That was so awesome!

on Mar. 15 2021 at 9:59 am
toothlessclay, New Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
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Dang, that's awesome! Great job man!

Kaidrinkstea said...
on Dec. 20 2020 at 8:42 am
Kaidrinkstea, Emmaus, Pennsylvania
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It was really well written and definitely written well! You gave me so inspo :D

L_G_Hall said...
on Sep. 22 2020 at 4:26 pm
L_G_Hall, None, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Why Spiders? Why couldn't it be "follow the butterflies"?






~Ronald Weasley "Chamber of Secrets"

I really liked this. It is a really good poem that touches your heart

on Aug. 30 2020 at 4:24 pm
FantasyManiac, New Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"No Mourners, No Funerals"- Six of Crows by Leigh Bardugo
"Have you ever asked yourself, do Monsters make war, or does war create monsters"- An Ember in the Ashes by Sabaa Tahir.
"We are the darkest acts made light" by Victoria Schwab

Ooh, really amazing twist in the end!! Really love the vague meaning behind the poem.