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Heart Break

June 20, 2011
By musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them


I look down at
the paper
holding the pen
in one hand
wiping my nose with
the other
splash
I look around confused
and see the tear
stains fall fast on
the paper
I smell something
it's his cologne
I taste saltwater
from my tears
I wipe my eyes
and see your
face
a whimper escapes
my mouth
the room starts
to spin
I hear his voice
thud
my head hits
the desk
I've fainted
crack
It's 12:30 a.m.
and my heart is
broken



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on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:19 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

funny thing is this has never happened to me but it mans i have a brilliant imagination thanks :P

on Aug. 6 2011 at 10:53 am
Ha-5-rika SILVER, Visakapatnam, Other
9 articles 7 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what your thoughts make it.
Happiness, success and the greatest of achievements are nothing if you don't have someone to share it with.
A life lived for others is a life worthwhile - Albert Einstein.

It is full of emotion and it is wonderful. 5 strs. I love it.

on Jul. 17 2011 at 2:50 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

that means i have a great imaginaton huh? thanks glad u like my work

on Jul. 17 2011 at 12:20 pm
TheSilverLaurel GOLD, Goole, Other
13 articles 0 photos 70 comments
This is great. it's descriptive, it's emotional, and it's just amazing! 5 stars!

on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:10 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

i know i must have a fantastic imagination haha

on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:05 pm
CallMeMrs.Batman SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
5 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It takes a great deal of courage to stand up to our enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to our friends."
-Professor Dumbledore to Harry Potter
"What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger."
-Unknown

I like this alot. from what I read on here and what Im told from other people you described it perfectly.

on Jul. 8 2011 at 1:03 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thanks that must mean i have a good imagination haha:P

sakina GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 12:37 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
18 articles 13 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A negative thinker See's a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u'll surely B successful in LIFE.
-Hazrat Ali (A.S)

I really liked this poem...And u've discribed heartbreak absolutely correct...

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:12 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

that's good

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:10 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Don't worry; it was only temporary. :)

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:08 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thanks and i'm sorry to hear that u know what it feels like :(

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:05 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Well, you have a good imagination then!  This is exactly what heartbreak feels like, believe me.

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:04 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thanks isn't it funny how i wrote this but i've never had my heart broken maybe a hairline crack but nothing like this

on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:03 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This perfectly describes heartbreak.  I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes either, so good job!

on Jul. 7 2011 at 8:18 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thanks much appreciated

on Jul. 7 2011 at 6:48 pm
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are because those who matter don't mind, and those who mind don't matter.

of course! i'd love to :)

on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:17 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thank u could u look at some of my other stuff

on Jul. 7 2011 at 10:23 am
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are because those who matter don't mind, and those who mind don't matter.

I really like this poem! especially how the sound words are in there spiratically. great job!

on Jul. 6 2011 at 7:21 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thank you very much :P

on Jul. 6 2011 at 10:06 am
FrownMonaLisa SILVER, Arlington, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened

Great poem. In this one breaking up the words so much is actually a great idea. It helps the reader understand how broken the person is.