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Big Mouth, little words MAG

July 1, 2009
By Joanna Loewenstein BRONZE, Ridgewood, New Jersey
Joanna Loewenstein BRONZE, Ridgewood, New Jersey
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Inevermetsomeone
Whocouldtalksofast
Andsaynexttonothing
Insuchanurgentmanner.

I NEVER MET SOMEONE
WHO COULD TALK SO LOUD
AND YET SPEAK SO SOFTLY
I COULD BARELY HEAR.

I … like … never … um … met … ­someone …
who … could … uh … think … so … much …
and … like … say … hmm … so … little …
that … I … er … saw … no … point … to … it …

!!!I!!!never!!!met!!!someone!!!
?who?could?use?tons?of?punctuation?
!?and!?express!?no!?emotion!?
… it … sounded … like … m-o-n-o-t-o-n-e …

I never met someone
who could fake it so well
and fail so miserably
that I stopped believing.

DidYOUum!!!hear

that?



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Risible SILVER said...
on Sep. 22 2011 at 4:34 pm
Risible SILVER, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Sooner or later, those who win are those who think they can." -Richard Bach

It's making fun of how teenagers talk and write, and exposing how with all the talk, not much actually gets said. It's also exposing someone that hides behind all that talk with lies and empty words. Sorry Joanna L. I love the poem and felt the need to respond! :) Apologies, and correct me, if that's not right! 

Mrs.parez said...
on Sep. 22 2011 at 1:12 pm
i dont get it

on Jul. 18 2011 at 6:39 pm
Laura_Oliver GOLD, Manchester, Connecticut
12 articles 2 photos 122 comments
This is a nice, fun poem. DidYOUum!!!hear that? I certainly did!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:01 pm
Angie.Hudak GOLD, Doylestown, Pennsylvania
10 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope for the best, expect the worst."
"One good thing about music, when it hits you, you feel no pain." -Bob Marley

I'm in love with this! The poem is creative and uses other things than words to get a point across :) I'd love to see more poetry like this!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 5:54 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

CREATIVITY ALERTNESS!!

on Jul. 18 2011 at 1:49 am
lovetildeath GOLD, Virginia Beach, Virginia
10 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm selfish, impatient, & a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control, & at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best.
- Marilyn Monroe

I like how the different forms of pnctuation t makes the flow of the poem easier to read.Good work and ikts qite original.

on Jun. 26 2011 at 7:32 pm
Kat4ever333 GOLD, Orange, California
14 articles 35 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
I make dark things beautiful and beautiful things dark!
-Kerli I.L.U

its unique and beautiful

on Jun. 26 2011 at 3:54 pm
HaydenStancil BRONZE, Lake City, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
You ARE Beautiful.

The part where it's all caps, made me yell it in my head. Which gave me a headache.

 

Great poem though!:D


on Jun. 8 2011 at 1:09 pm
cassxxx8 BRONZE, Northport, New York
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this was interesting to read

on Jan. 1 2011 at 10:44 pm
emilllydubinn SILVER, Marlboro, New Jersey
9 articles 2 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
photograpy is about stopping the world in its tracks, but poetry is about capturing the world in motion.

Hmm...this is very interesting style!

tsa502 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 1:46 pm
tsa502 BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This is a well written poem. It has a lot of creativity to it. This poem uses different types of words to make the poem flow easier. The last stanza is all my favorite. "I never met someone/who could fake it so well/and fail so miserably/that I stopped believing. This stanza could be used to describe many people and their situation in the world today.

Amnoona BRONZE said...
on Oct. 5 2010 at 4:50 pm
Amnoona BRONZE, Bridgeport, Illinois
1 article 1 photo 10 comments

Very creative! A well-written poem with a nice iambic-pentameter.

Welldone. This is fabulous!


Suhyoon BRONZE said...
on Oct. 5 2010 at 3:42 am
Suhyoon BRONZE, Guangzhou, Other
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Prestige! Is that nothing, sir? The respect of fools, the astonishment of children, the envy of the rich, the scorn of the wise." BARNAVE

Amazing rhythm and voice!

You make excellent use of irregular spacing and punctuation to achieve this effect.

A clear message too :)

 


on May. 26 2010 at 1:18 pm
savagivity777, Sante Fe, New Mexico
0 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Fo rizzle."

While the creative approach is pleasing at first read through, it lacks the sort of depth that would cause me to read this again, and again. Other than that, Phillip is pleased.

on May. 26 2010 at 10:39 am
BiancaMarie SILVER, Colchester, Vermont
5 articles 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
better loved then lost then never to have loved at all

i like itttt!

 


on May. 4 2010 at 10:39 pm
awesomeman123 SILVER, Mount Hood Parkdale, Oregon
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see in the world"
--Mahatma Ghandi

uhh i get it, i'm still a little hazy on the point of writing this. but overall, great poem!

on Apr. 20 2010 at 8:20 pm
Omg awesome poem it was so creative and i can not wait to turn it in as my language arts homework on monday. The assignment was to find an awesome poem that you thaught was original and something you have never seen before this one totally won.

on Apr. 12 2010 at 10:07 am
Literalist17 SILVER, Monte Vista, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Tact is, of course, only for those who lack the wit to possess sarcasm"

wow, i really liked this, very nicely done.

on Apr. 12 2010 at 8:32 am
nvrxexistedx2xu GOLD, Chestertown, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
“love will always be in me for you even when i want to give up” – S.E.B

I really like this!

on Apr. 10 2010 at 7:33 pm
LovelyMiss GOLD, Floresville, Texas
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wow this was really creative i loved it!!