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My Love, the Wind

May 18, 2014
By Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

I slump upon the swing
A lullaby it sings
Imploring me to sleep
And ease my suffering.

Then Hypnos beckons onward
To a forest, to a stream.
Too late, I have been captured
By reality.

A tear flows down my cheek
No comfort, no relief
Till I feel the wind’s embrace
That leaves me trembling.

The wind caresses softly
He whispers in my ear
“Only I can set you free,
Only I will hold you dear.”

He leads me down a path
To a forest ever-green.
He dances with the shadows.
He twirls among the trees.

He ripples in the pond.
He sits among the leaves.
Yet joy he cannot cherish
If he is not with me.

And though I wished to live forever
In his forest green,
My heart of hearts kept thinking
Of my family.

So he kissed me ever softly
Then I woke up on my swing.
Everything is normal,
And the wind is beckoning.

The author's comments:

I really love going outside and feeling the wind in my hair and watch it make the leaves dance.

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This article has 33 comments.

on Jun. 10 2015 at 5:16 pm
Thenefariouswriter, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Perfection is not attainable, but if we chase perfection we can catch excellence.

Engaging prose and very lovely! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem.

on Jun. 7 2015 at 8:28 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

XD so many comments, I think what I wanna say is already taken XD so I'll say I like it XD good job lol

on Aug. 8 2014 at 1:53 pm
violawritermady BRONZE, Lehi, Utah
3 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The true artist does not create art as an end to himself. He creates it for others; humanity is the goal." -Bronislaw Huberman

Very good work! I absolutely loved it. Keep writing! You are simply awesome! 

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Jul. 18 2014 at 7:51 am
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
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Awesome indeed! I love the personification!

on Jul. 18 2014 at 1:55 am
bookmaniac PLATINUM, Issaquah, Washington
41 articles 18 photos 9 comments
This poem made me feel so peaceful...wonderful job!

on Jul. 17 2014 at 4:41 pm
CheesePie BRONZE, Princeton, New Jersey
1 article 8 photos 7 comments

KaavyaM SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2014 at 8:15 am
KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
9 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.

This is lovely. The sounds, and rhythm you've used has a beautifully tranquil feel to them. Amazing.

on Jul. 12 2014 at 7:56 am
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

wow really good. five stars! great rhyming, rhythm, and emotion.

on Jul. 11 2014 at 11:51 am
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
7 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated" By- Dr. Maya Angelou

I really enjoy this! Great Work!!

on Jul. 8 2014 at 9:38 am
CosmoPhoenix PLATINUM, Ernakulam, Kerala, Other
28 articles 5 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world." - Nelson Mandela

I was almost inside the poem! Gorgeous imagination, fabulous work! I am able to get the feeling out of it. Keep writing!

on Jul. 5 2014 at 4:16 pm
Sparrow01 SILVER, Appalachin, New York
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I felt a really cool connection with your poem cause i love the wind. I thought it was cool how you personified it :) good job

on Jul. 4 2014 at 11:58 am
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Okay, so I've readthis before, but I can't help commenting again! I positively love this piece!!

on Jul. 2 2014 at 5:46 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

I like it how you circled the caption, starting and ending with the swing. Other things havemore or less been said by the others already. :)

on Jun. 27 2014 at 1:51 pm
SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You aren't going to impose the patriarchal paradigm on ME." Alaska Young

It truly makes me feel one with nature. Truly captivating.

on Jun. 27 2014 at 9:59 am
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

Very relaxing

on Jun. 25 2014 at 12:40 am
Silverness SILVER, Logan, Ohio
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I like the sence this creates as you read it, very well written. Keep up the good work. :)

on Jun. 24 2014 at 4:42 pm
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

Thanks so much everyone!!!^^ <3

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 23 2014 at 7:31 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

This is a gorgeous poem; your imagery is fantastic, and I think all of your imagery is hauntingly beautiful. "And the wind is beckoning..." Lovely. Keep writing, please!

on Jun. 23 2014 at 12:46 am
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

I like your allusion by using Hypnos. Great poem!

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jun. 21 2014 at 9:10 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

The beautiful way you enhanced this simple idea into an emotional and deep metaphor was brilliant. Keep writing!!