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No more pain.

February 6, 2015
By embura BRONZE, Northview, South Dakota
embura BRONZE, Northview, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
I will not live forever because I cannot live forever and if I could live forever then I would live forever, but since I cannot live forever then I will not live forever.


Tears not seen                                            
cries not heard
cheeks are wet
wrist is wetter
pain,pain filled with pain
blood means pain
but so does tears
if only you knew
if only you saw
if only you heard
this life is ignored
pain,pain filled with pain
blood means pain
but so does tears
blood on the floor
blood on the wrist
blood on the blade
lifeless girl on the ground
pain,pain no more pain
blood was pain
and so was tears
no one heard
no one saw
no one knew
her life never existed
pain,pain no more pain
blood was pain
and so was tears                 


The author's comments:

I was going through a tough time when i wrote this.


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rick123 said...
on Mar. 9 2015 at 7:22 pm
rick123, New York, New York
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PLEASE RATE AND COMMENT PLEASE RATE AND COMMENT PLEASE RATE AND COMMENT. HOW DOES IT FEEL!? STOP BEING A SPAMMER

on Feb. 27 2015 at 7:43 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Emotional but I feel longer lines and more description would be beneficial to express your point.

WitchBitch said...
on Feb. 26 2015 at 6:02 pm
WitchBitch, Edinburgh, Other
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Favorite Quote:
We are creatures of the underworld, we can't afford to love

I agree with @MrPickering the repetition just seems to add something to it for me, I'd call it beautiful but its too twisted for beautiful, it's more...shocking and honest.

on Feb. 18 2015 at 2:48 am
MrPickering BRONZE, Berkeley, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The most merciful thing in the world is the inability of the human mind to correlate all of its contents."
H.P. Lovecraft

I like the use of repetition and unusual utilization of punctuation. Well done. I enjoyed your poem. :)

Starakk SILVER said...
on Feb. 9 2015 at 9:22 am
Starakk SILVER, Nowhere, Other
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Awesome!!!! Thnx 4 sharing this keep writing :)

jamie. BRONZE said...
on Feb. 9 2015 at 9:19 am
jamie. BRONZE, Masfield, Ohio
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that is a cool poem