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Her first love
Summary:
Everything's perfect. Or is it?
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Her first love
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This book has 5 comments.
Some improvements you could make to shape your story:
1. Spelling and grammar; don't capitalize if it isn't the first word of a sentence or a proper noun
2. Some parts repeat, fix sentence structure
3. Elaborate. You don't explain why Hope loves Austin or vice-versa, or why she feels so much pain when they break up
4. It was hard to understand at times, again, spelling and grammar
5. Change perspective. it would be more effective if written in first person
6. Less overused phrases
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