Ah, the pure vulgarity, passion, and hapless adventures of the sea! I love it, truly, I do. It reads like a fishwive's tale or a seafaring version of Dickens'.    Now, besides some minor grammar, sentence structure, article paragraph spacing issues, here's my personal problem, "Brown as a dead leaf that the wind has swept away from its tree, the sailor stood on the brink of a long jetty of toothy cliffs at one end of a small cove that was bounded on the other side by a similar jut of cliffs." Now, now, now, I never took you for a rambler, don't take offence  but there are times to be eloquent and there are times to be laconic. I know I sound like some 21st century nitwit by writing this, but in any introduction, take the reader immediately into the heart of your story. We love hearing about the cliffs and the sailor, but the tone is really the issue with me. What of the mystery, the adventure? Is there anything that can make us feel the remotely bit connected with such a hard, sea-faring man? If you write solely to describe every brick and cobblestone, how long will the reader's enthusiasm last? These are the questions authors writing to an ADHD-attention span audience must ask. I realize I sound as if I have little to no faith in my fellow peers, but in truth, being a writer in our society is a tricky business. Authors like Stephanie Meyer are overly indulged and glorified because of their complete gratification to the restless masses. Writers such as Dickens can only be understood by those of more mature tastes nowadays, and hence, our overall education system suffers. I feel as if I'm writing a windbag, opinionated article on a simple comment...   I adore your writing style, descriptions, and dialogue, though, don't get me wrong. And to be a true writer, step one is to write for the sake of the pleasure of writing itself and no other. :)

Thank you so much, everyone!  PS.  White spaces?  Hm.  When I wrote it on Microsoft, it had a lot of white spaces, but when I posted it on Teen Ink, it didn't save those.  Thanks again!

THis is a good story!  The description was good.  Ia gee with Guardian though, the spacing was a bit crammed, making it a little hard to read.  Other than that good job!

Lots of good description and a good story that keeps you wondering. The only suggestion is that you might want to add more "White space" when placing an article on the web. (the white space between lines and scentences and such). Its been proven that people like more white space when reading things on the computer and such (it may get you more viewers). But all in all I really liked it and you've got a lot of talent. :)

Thank you for the feedback, I really appreciate it. 

Vividly described, and with terrific dialouge. My only complaint was that the long, heavily descriptive paragraphs make reading a bit difficult.

This story shows a vivid and lively imagination at work!  Excellent dialogue and imagery.  This young writer shows promise!