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"I'm A Hoarder's Kid" Response

October 18, 2012
By Charris9623 BRONZE, Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
Charris9623 BRONZE, Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
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This article attracts the eye when read. It keeps the reader interested and the storyline is great. The fact that you are the child of a hoarder,isn’t funny, but somehow it makes you really want to read more. The intro for your story was so plain but it had something about it that didn’t make me want to flip the page. I could feel the emotion in the sentence. The whole article was just flowing with emotion and you could feel the sorrow and hurt. You write the story with descriptions but with plainness as well that makes the story come alive. It feels like I was right their with you during all of it. I love the way the story flows and does’t feel like i’m reading a list. The way you end the story was breathtaking. That one phrase, “but I am so much more.” tied the story up perfectly. The hurt turned into happiness and really made me feel the overcoming of being a child of a hoarder.



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