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Intensity

June 13, 2009
By Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell


The tears poured off her eyelids; slid down her cheeks; fell to the floor. Slowly she sank to the ground, trembling slightly. Her breath came in deep sobs, wracking her chest. She barely had enough air. She did not hear the soft footfalls coming ever closer. She did not see him as he sat down next to her. She did, however, feel as his arm wrapped around her shoulders. Turning slightly, the girl buried her face in his shoulder. Her friend held her tighter, resting his head in her soft chestnut curls.

The two of them sat that way for what felt like hours; the girl sobbing loudly on the boy’s shoulder, the boy holding her quietly, steadfastly. Finally, the girl released her last tear. She looked up at the boy, eyes red from crying, cheeks flushed. He turned to her, a small crooked smile on his lips. To the girl’s surprise, tears were slipping down his face as well. “Why are you crying?” she asked softly, voice cracking. The boy considered the question for a second.

“I am crying because you are crying,” he replied truthfully as yet another tear trickled down his handsome face. His smile was still there, unwavering.

The girl stared at him with wide eyes. He stared back at her. A chill like an electric current flowed through both of them. The air around them tingled with static. Slowly, as if pulled by some invisible force, the two teenagers moved closer. Their faces were within a hair’s breath of each other’s. “Why me?” she whispered. “Why did you choose me?” Her eyes darted back and forth, looking for an answer written on his face. “You are the only one who’s real. The only one out of all those girls who knows what it means to truly love someone. Even though he broke your heart, you just keep going. I like that. I think… I think I may even love that.”

His eyes gleamed with a passion long suppressed. “I think I may love you.” His sweet breath lingered on her lips. The girl’s heart began to beat frantically, as if trying to keep up with her rapidly changing emotions. “I think I may love you too,” she admitted.

Without meaning to, the girl shut her eyes. The two leaned even closer, closing the gap between them. His soft lips pressed against hers. She wrapped her arms around his neck, and his arms coiled around her waist. The kiss deepened.

Gently, they pulled apart. Both were smiling softly. “Thank you,” the girl said under her breath, so quiet that the boy sitting right next to her wasn’t sure he had heard her at first.

“For what?” She stared deeply into his eyes. He held her gaze, reciprocating the intensity. “For giving me a reason to live again. For saving me from falling.”

“Anytime. Thank you, too. Thanks for letting me in. Thanks for not pushing me away.”

At the same time, the two teenagers said, “I love you,” sealing their fate.

The two leaned in closer, their foreheads, then lips, pressing against the other’s.



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JoyW.C BRONZE said...
on Nov. 14 2010 at 7:10 am
JoyW.C BRONZE, Leesburg, Florida
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"if it is to be, it's up to me!"






-Unknown-

wow i just wrote a story and i hope it has alot of comments just like yours! i think this story is brillant and has a lot of big words and details :D

on Nov. 14 2010 at 1:34 am
cupcakegirl10 BRONZE, Gurgaon, Other
1 article 0 photos 25 comments

OMGGGGGGG!!! :D :D

this is insaneee and cute and adorable and sweet and just AWESOME!! :)

im a sucker for love stories! :P

please keep writing!!!


Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 5:45 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you!! And I'm so glad I could help motivate you! I'd love to read what you come up with once you're done!! :D Thanks again!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 5:44 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Oh, thank you so much!!! :D I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And I know, arent the comments amazing?! People, like yourself, just rock. <33333 Thank you!! :D

on Nov. 9 2010 at 4:52 pm
this is really good. i was writing something similar to this but gave up on it... now i think i'll try again. thanks for the motivation!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 3:36 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

i wish someone could keep me from falling

on Nov. 6 2010 at 10:39 pm
fairbrat BRONZE, Sacramento, California
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Better to ask forgivness than permission

that was so beautiful! i loved it it was amazing

BZ=purefire said...
on Nov. 4 2010 at 3:10 pm
This was so touching in so many ways:) I truely have a reason to live. All these comments are so awesome:)) Great job Ladies!!!!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Nov. 4 2010 at 9:09 am
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

:) Thank you very very much!!! I am so glad you liked it!! :D Thanks again!!

on Nov. 2 2010 at 7:29 pm
Stacee O&#39Dell BRONZE, Manistee, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments
oh my goodness...i loved it this story...it made me cry :)...i really hope you continue the story..it was truely beautiful

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 26 2010 at 8:47 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Will do! :D

on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:38 pm
choirchic101 SILVER, Norwalk, California
9 articles 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
in order for God to use all of you you have to be completely broken

no problem. just let me know when you do

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:27 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Huh. I went to your user page but all I found was your favorites! I couldn't find any of your work!! D: Maybe if you sent me a link? Because somehow I can't find it.... (Which somehow doesnt surprise me. I'm computer illiterate.)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:17 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you so so much!! And I'll be glad to read a few of your things! I'll go do that right now! XD

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:15 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

:D Thank you!!! I'm so glad that you felt that way when reading this!!! That is exactly the type of reaction that I hoped people would get, and it makes me so happy to know some people who read this actually felt those types of feelings! And I think this might be the end of it.... But I might just try expanding it into a longer story when I get some spare time! Who knows! XD

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:12 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thanks!! As I said just below, as soon as I get a chance I think I will take up that suggestion and try expanding! Thanks so much!! I'll tell you how it goes!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:11 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thank you thank you thank you! :D I'm glad you liked it!!

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:10 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

Thanks!! And maybe I'll try that as soon as I get some free time! With school and stuff I don't really have too much time, and I'm also working on a couple other projects! But as soon as I get a chance, I'll definately try expanding this!! Thanks for the suggestion! :)

Lindsey_O GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 8:07 pm
Lindsey_O GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 180 comments

Favorite Quote:
Words slide off the lead,
creating permanent marks;
writer's secret code.
~Lindsey O'Connell

**Blushing like crazy**

I literally cannot stop smiling right now. You just made my day. <3 Thank you sooooo so much!!! I'm... Simply overjoyed that you liked this as much as you did!!! Really, I'm so glad :D Thanks again!!

 

Man I just cant get over how nice that comment was XD THANK YOOOU  <3333


on Oct. 23 2010 at 10:45 pm
KandiceMichelle PLATINUM, Stansonburg, North Carolina
24 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yet God has made everything BEAUTIFUL for its own time. He has planted ETERNITY in the human heart, but even so, people cannot see the whole scope of God's work from beginning to end." -Ecclesiastes 3:11

This is really good, you should make it into a longer story with more detail.