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With Me

April 6, 2017
By wolvesandwilderness GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
wolvesandwilderness GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
10 articles 47 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Funny how a single word can change everything in your life."
"It is not funny at all. Steel is power. Money is power. But of all the things in all the worlds, words are power.”

Darrow au Andromedus and Nero au Augustus in Red Rising.


I gaze into her radiant blue eyes;
I wonder- why would she ever leave me?
She says she has found a much better prize,
A man finer than I could hope to be.
It tears at me, it burns with ev’ry heartbeat…
My love, my ev’rything- she will forsake
Me, and shatter me with her dark deceit.
All the meaning from the life, she will take.
I listen to her voice but do not hear
As she says why she is no longer mine.
My thoughts, clouded and dull, begin to veer-
She does not see it; we are God’s design.
And the one way to keep her by my side
Is to hold her in this room, bound and tied.


The author's comments:

This work was inspired by two other works: Porphyria's Lover (Robert Browning) and The Tale of Bluebeard.


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on Aug. 19 2017 at 7:45 am
wolvesandwilderness GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
10 articles 47 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Funny how a single word can change everything in your life."
"It is not funny at all. Steel is power. Money is power. But of all the things in all the worlds, words are power.”

Darrow au Andromedus and Nero au Augustus in Red Rising.

Thanks. Poetry isn't really my thing, but we had to write it for class so I thought, "Why not post it?" What's the harm? On a completely unrelated note, how long does it take for pictures to post?

on Aug. 8 2017 at 8:03 pm
bo_olsen PLATINUM, Nampa, Idaho
28 articles 1 photo 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I Solemnly Swear That I Am Up To No Good"

You are really, really talented. Keep writing! :)

on May. 7 2017 at 4:23 pm
wolvesandwilderness GOLD, Lakeland, Florida
10 articles 47 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Funny how a single word can change everything in your life."
"It is not funny at all. Steel is power. Money is power. But of all the things in all the worlds, words are power.”

Darrow au Andromedus and Nero au Augustus in Red Rising.

Thank you. I thought I had it as 'my' in my original copy, but I guess not.

on May. 7 2017 at 3:02 pm
addictwithapen PLATINUM, Norfolk, Virginia
21 articles 14 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm at it again as an addict with a pen." - twenty one pilots, addict with a pen

This is a bit disturbing, but I imagine you meant it to be that way. You did well depicting the mind of the speaker, and it’s interesting to think about how the situation must seem completely different from the woman’s point of view. When you say “All the meaning from the life, she will take”, I think it would sound better to say “my life”. Otherwise, well done.