Just thought I would comment on the fact, that this is not a sonnet. Too many lines, Sonnets are Fourteen lines long. Yours however consists of sixteen, And on another note, you used the word "Condemn" in a sort of way that makes the work seem a bit quirky and a bit slack. Condemn what? Condemn yourself, other people, your dreams perhaps. Other than those minor flaws, I thought this was an intresting piece, not to mention you have hit a relateable subject (At least with me)  besides the misplace of the one word, you do have a sort of knack for poetic eloquence. So do keep writing sir, you will most defitnably get better with time and practice. I myself still have far to go.