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Rewritten Sonnet 148

July 26, 2013
By Wallypenguin PLATINUM, Brunswick, Georgia
Wallypenguin PLATINUM, Brunswick, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Get thee to a nunnery!"
-Hamlet


Girl, you be lookin’ so very fine now,
Them others say you is ugly, They wrong;
If dey right... , you is fine, you be so wow,
You so good I could write a perty song.

What dey be talkin about? Dey so slow,
You is more fly and swag den fiddy cent,
Cuz you is swagalicious, you is mo’e.
But is you real, is you someone so bent?

How is what I see right, love is trippy,
I so stuck, What be right? You or not you?
I wonder why you be so, so slippy,
I cain’t see who you is, you or who?

O trippy girl, you is a slippy girl,
You ain’t worth no diamonds or a nice pearl.


The author's comments:
This piece is a complete rewrite of Shakespeare's Sonnet #148. This sonnet still conveys the message of the poem. See for your self by looking up the original.

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on Aug. 1 2013 at 4:44 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

This is a really different style of a Shakespearean sonnet.  It seems to convey a similar message as Sonnet 148. However, you may want to fix some spelling errors and grammar and it would still work the iambic pantameter, yet the style in this poem is more like a rap and filled with slang.

on Aug. 1 2013 at 2:42 pm
Wallypenguin PLATINUM, Brunswick, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Get thee to a nunnery!"
-Hamlet

This is the product of my laziness. We had to rewrite Shakespeare in our own words while keeping the meaning the same. This way I could commit all sorts of grammar mistakes to make it work with iambic pantameter. :-)

on Jul. 31 2013 at 5:18 pm
jazzwarrior GOLD, Springfield, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Weeds are flowers, too, once you get to know them. -A.A. Milne

What a clever idea...I never thought of rewriting Shakespeare's poetry. I might have to steal that!