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I Remember...

October 12, 2009
By ohmy_chelsie SILVER, Lawrenceburg, Indiana
ohmy_chelsie SILVER, Lawrenceburg, Indiana
7 articles 1 photo 4 comments

No one was watching and no one was praying
but what does it matter anyway
and everyone could see as she stepped out of the car
that she hit just a little too too hard

the girls in the back were crying out they're dying
their bodies meshed with the car
you could tell they were hit just a little too too hard

so many dying
so many crying
no one was watching
no one was praying
but what does it matter anyway

I remember the day like it was yesterday
I can hear the squeal of the tires
and the ghost of the screams
the crying out loud
the bust of the seams
they all went flying flying
so high on life but they were dying dying

so many dying
so many crying
no one was watching
no one was praying
but what does it matter anyway

and everyone could see as she stepped out of the car
that she hit just a little too too hard
but what does it matter anyway

the rain poured down
as the night crept in
they closed their eyes for the final time
making a wish and holding each other tight
but what does it matter anyway

so many dying
so many crying
no one was watching
no one was praying
but what does it matter anyway

The author's comments:
May 9 2008 I lost a very dear friend in a car accident. We were childhood best friend and then we started to grow apart but just before she died we started getting close again. I remember the last day she was alive. She smiled at me. and screamed HEY CHELSIES BACK. And then on that rainy foggy night She and another girl died in the car accident. The driver walked away with her life but is she really living anymore?
any way yeah this piece is important to me.

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on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:32 pm
JordanJordanJordan GOLD, Churchville, Virginia
14 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
He is here to keep us safe, not scared.

I am really sorry for you, death is hard. As I was reading this I was singing it in my head. Very good for a song and I got a melody to it and everything. I will have to pull out the old six string and play it to my melody. GOOD JOB.

Sarbear GOLD said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 3:12 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you're a mile away from them and you have their shoes.
--When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people's eyes.

I don't agree, if this is her way of getting out the sadness and pain of losing someone she loved then to me, that's great. I also really liked this and it's very moving.

bmmseh said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:30 am
This is a very sad song!!! I'm really sorry about your friend that died.

BMMSkf said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:11 am
this poem makes me sad. :( But its still a good one.............. <3 it

on Jan. 12 2010 at 7:47 am
Lover_that_Hates DIAMOND, Reynolds, Georgia
76 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She was fascinated with words. To her words were things of beauty, each like a magical powder or potion that could be combinded with other words to create powerful spells." From: Lighting(By: Dean Koontz)

I like this alot. Im very sorry about your friend. this song is great.

on Dec. 26 2009 at 6:53 pm
Mysteriousmystii BRONZE, Davenport, Iowa
1 article 8 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Strengths lie in differences, not in similarities."

This is really good! :)

on Dec. 26 2009 at 11:22 am
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

This was incredble. So beautiful and touching, I couldn't stop reading. The simplistic repetition was perfect, because anyone could imagine. I'm sorry for your loss.

Lyndsayyy said...
on Dec. 4 2009 at 2:17 pm
Great Job! I like how every so often there was a rhym sceme.. Keep it up! :)

tj12321 said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 1:08 pm
Great job, very very very very very very very good job. I am so sorry to hear about your friend, Just remeber that life goes on. I am sure that she is happy where she is. Keep up the great work. Your Doing great!:0

tj12321 said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 1:03 pm
Great job. I am so sorry to hear about your friend, but just remeber, life goes on, and shes happy where she is. Keep writing, your great

on Oct. 20 2009 at 2:22 pm
Callaghan PLATINUM, Medford, Massachusetts
41 articles 8 photos 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right.
-Marcus Zusak, The Book Thief

Oh, I'm so sorry! Really, though, this piece was great. If writing is what you love, then keep doing it because im sure that's what she would have wanted. (:(

on Oct. 20 2009 at 11:38 am
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
15 articles 0 photos 119 comments
very good job!!

just know you need to be happy thats what she

would of wanted!!

keep writing though!!(:

on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:55 pm
Kendra92 SILVER, The Colony, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 10 comments
I'm so sorry. It's terrible that you would have to go through something like that. Keep writing. You use your inspiration so very well. This is amazing :]

on Oct. 19 2009 at 11:05 am
dylonmichael GOLD, El Dorado, Kansas
10 articles 3 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
i have two one is "live life as if it were your last day on earth" and two is "never make some one your everything because when they leave you you have nothing"

omg im sorry for your loss like march this year i lost my friend in a car accident but the only difference is she wasnt hit she swerved off the road and into a culvert and the water pushed her car into the thing and she got trapped and couldnt get out in the end she drowned

seapenguin said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 3:01 am
seapenguin, Healdsburg, California
0 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm a super hero, but with no powers or motivation.

Oh, my God. I am so sorry for your lost. Death isn't easy. These lyrics are really good. Good job, kiddo. :)

on Oct. 18 2009 at 6:48 pm
anotherromanctic PLATINUM, Wilmington, North Carolina
29 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it's not okay, then it's not over." - Anonymous

it almost seems as if you're apathetic about living after your friend. you should live things more for your late friend. sorry if this offends. great piece.

on Oct. 17 2009 at 9:47 am
singingchic15 SILVER, Belfast, Maine
9 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Which hurts the most:
Saying something and wishing you had not,
Or saying nothing,
and wishing you had?

I'm really sorry about your friend but, this piece that you wrote was very moving and I loved it. Keep writing!

on Oct. 17 2009 at 4:51 am
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
19 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

i'm sorry to hear about your friend.

but yes, this is very well written :)