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moonlit meadow

September 24, 2009
By halls SILVER, Harrison City, Pennsylvania
halls SILVER, Harrison City, Pennsylvania
6 articles 0 photos 19 comments

First day of winter
the night is turning colder
the stillness is gone

The little brown fawn
dashed through the glistening meadow
in the moonlit snow.

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on Aug. 19 2012 at 9:15 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."

I really like this! It's really peaceful and beautiful...the picture that comes to my mind when I read this poem is clear and lovely.  Would you mind checking out my work if you get a chance...I would really aprreicate some feedback. Thanks! But anyway, this poem is awesome!

on Sep. 12 2011 at 11:06 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

it sounds magical!! I really liked it, and I would have loved it more if you followed the syllable rule in the second stanza...there are 8 syllables in the second line of the second stanza.. but still awesome job. keep writing! :) and check out my stuff.

halls SILVER said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 3:34 pm
halls SILVER, Harrison City, Pennsylvania
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thank you this was also my favorite

rimelb said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 11:00 am
Of the four contributions of yours that I read, this is my favorite. When I read the second part (about the fawn) I felt like I was a silent observer on this scene and I truly felt surrounded by the peace of nature. I wonder what you meant by "the stillness is gone" in your first stanza though. I feel like snow and winter brings on stillness, rather than takes it away.