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Nature's Wind

July 30, 2014
By EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
15 articles 2 photos 46 comments

Whoosh!
The sound, the feel,
The life of wind.
Impossible to decipher.
The sound of a million breaths.
It’s a shot of adrenaline,
A drum beat, A summer in Rome.
The reassuring caress of family,
Of home.



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EttieGH GOLD said...
on Feb. 17 2015 at 12:52 am
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
15 articles 2 photos 46 comments
Thanks:)That's sort of what it started off as

on Feb. 15 2015 at 8:59 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

This has a nice feel, almost like a longer version of a haiku. I very much enjoyed it.

EttieGH GOLD said...
on Jan. 30 2015 at 4:30 am
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
15 articles 2 photos 46 comments
Yeah, now that I've reread it I can see that. Thanks for the tip:)

on Jan. 27 2015 at 5:22 pm
AbigailGilgal GOLD, Cloquet, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I write for the same reason I breath- because if I didn't, I would die"
~Isaac Asimov

"There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at the typewriter and bleed."
~ Ernest Hemingway

This was a superb piece. you did a great job packing so much feeling into just a few lines. My only suggestion would be to change the first word. your whole poem flows really well but whoosh is to choppy sounding. Just my opinion though :)