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Everything Beneath MAG

By Edye Pucciarelli SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
Edye Pucciarelli SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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“we have yet to break the surface”
I whispered
after hours of scratching the stars away
from the sky with my fingertips
to cusp them inside of my hands
and feel their light.

I had every intention of stripping
the darkness from the night –
of pulling the constellations away
from their imprints within the atmosphere
to reveal Him

because years ago,
Father had told me that
“God is in everything”

and from then on,
I chose to move my body gently and eat slowly,
to swallow Eucharist
in the smallest of pieces
and nibble timidly around

the cores of peaches in the case that
He was within its pit, and
whenever I close my lips –
I can feel Him extend His legs,
pinned in all directions beneath my tongue,
shaping my words from biblical psalm,
pulling sin in strands of prayer
from the lining of my throat …

I can always feel him,
not heavy of a burden
but wise,
spread evenly about my skin,
in everything I see and touch …

holding Him, the stars, my pulse,
parts of Him,
inside my hand
realizing that no battle had ever
been fought and won alone.

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Rayne GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 11:44 pm
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
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I love the line "after hours of scratching the stars away."


on Nov. 19 2010 at 3:46 pm
dancingintheflames GOLD, Kirksville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
She stood in the storm and when the wind didn't blow her away, she adjusted her sails<3

well i just started writing and i think it was wonderful and unless your a major in peotry get of thier back! it was great!

on Sep. 21 2010 at 12:01 am
Aristine BRONZE, Coppell, Texas
1 article 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Show me a hero and I will write you a tragedy. - Scott F. Fitzgerald

This is a beautiful, lovely poem. Your imagery is wonderful and the way you phrase things is unique and interesting. I particularly love the opening stanza. It certainly deserves to be in the print.

on Sep. 15 2010 at 7:14 pm

I love how you wrote a poem about God.

It is so inspirational. Stunning.

Keep it up, God bless you.

hellosea said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:31 pm
I think it's seriously ridiculous the way you guys reacted to the comment. why in the world should someone 'keep critisism' to themselves? as a writer, we need to learn to appreciate critique, allowing us to become better writers. demetria wrote a nice, polite comment on an awesome poem that stated something i was unsure about, and you snapped at her for being a jerk, which she/he was NOT. so what is this...say something good or say nothing at all?

friend-less said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 10:54 pm
friend-less, Natick, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
The only way to deal with an unfree world is to become so absolutely free that your very existence is an act of rebellion.

this was amazing. i'm stunned with how good that poem was. you have serious skill. a natural talent.

Photo_97 said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 1:14 pm
Photo_97, Ct., Connecticut
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This is the kind of skill  that pushes me to stop and look over my work to make it better.the way you take words like "scratching the stars away" you just make them flow like there ment too be!!! i love it. keep it flowing :)

on Aug. 4 2010 at 8:29 pm
Hoping4never BRONZE, Bowling Green, Kentucky
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I may not change the world, but I will spark the mind of the somone who will.

I think its amazing how youve managed to keep your feeling and words flowing evenly. My greatest downfall is that I can not seem to let it flow clearly its like all my thaughts and feeling are not complete. Breakage. I really enjoyed this, I cant explain why but it gives me great thaughts. "truly the Lord is in this place"

on Aug. 2 2010 at 12:38 pm
KirstynAlexandra PLATINUM, Baltimore, Maryland
24 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"I\'m selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can\'t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don\'t deserve me at my best.\"
— Marilyn Monroe

Imagination is more important than knowledge...
Albert Einstein

Amazing poem, keep it up! plz check out my work, it would be highly appreciated! :)

on Jul. 10 2010 at 6:41 pm
NightBloomingJazmyne SILVER, Cumming, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
There are two kinds of writer: those that make you think, and those that make you wonder.
- Brian Aldiss


on Jul. 10 2010 at 7:15 am
Gabriella.MM BRONZE, Underhill, Vermont
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I love the definitions of god you use in this. It really made me see things in a different light. 

on Jul. 3 2010 at 2:07 pm
-daydreamer- SILVER, Smyrna, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Carpe.... Carpe diem. Seize the day, boys. Make your lives extraordinary." ---Robin Williams, "Dead Poets Society"

Amazing. Heart-stopping. Wow. Really, all your poems are just so wonderful and emotional and thoughtful and real. I am so jealous of you right now, I wish I had your way with words. Do not stop writing! =)

coly33 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 18 2010 at 7:24 pm
coly33 BRONZE, Lyndhurst, New Jersey
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wow that was verryy emprisive i usually don't like poems like this but i loved this one good job

i loved the first part about the stars and "after hours of scratching the stars away from my fingertips to cusp them inside of my hands and feel their light."  absoloutly amazing an dinspiring



on Jun. 18 2010 at 4:32 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

did i ask what you THINK i should say? huh? no i don't believe i did. now you stick with your "hey, good job" and i will say what i feel should be said. thankyou!(NOT)

on Jun. 18 2010 at 2:14 pm
possiblylindsey GOLD, Keller, Texas
12 articles 12 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"see? if i liked chris drew, id end up like randy. 5 foot 1 and vegetarian. vegetarians arent men." -camden
"what are you grinnin' at?" - mr. martinez
"you just cant recreate stupid." - jacob

can you not just accpet that this poem is good?? just let off with the criticism and just say "hey, good job." jeez.

on Jun. 11 2010 at 10:07 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
22 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

beautifully written. plz keep writing

on May. 27 2010 at 9:44 pm
kookymnstr PLATINUM, Crowder, Oklahoma
27 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
" One good thing about music, When it hits you, You feel no pain."- Bob Marley

I absolutely love this poem!


on May. 27 2010 at 7:38 pm
samphantom96 BRONZE, Reynolds, Illinois
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

the tittle of this poem made me write my own thax for the inssparation


on May. 27 2010 at 4:28 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

i really enjoyed the beginning.  towards the end i felt that it was somewhat getting lost because your closing mentioned " realizing that no battle had ever been fought and won alone" this kind of confused me because in the beginning you never gave the reader a since of battle and or struggle. Try to show(don't tell) the reader that the character is going through something. it doesn't have to be a large description but something small to give the reader a chance to understand the pain/struggle.

on May. 9 2010 at 8:57 am
hello.beautiful PLATINUM, New York, New York
35 articles 29 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Look at the nations and watch— and be utterly amazed. For I am going to do something in your days that you would not believe, even if you were told. -Habakkuk 1:5