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Clipped Wings of Innocence

November 17, 2013
By EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
EmmaClaire0823 GOLD, Bay Minette, Alabama
13 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you wish to see in the world."

The wings on which innocence flew
virtuous and pristine
clipped and maimed
to the point of grotesque vestige
courtesy of sin

The author's comments:
It is about when you truly grow up. Some people don't grow up until they are 30, while others grow up when they are under 10. Something happens in your life that makes you lose your innocent, naive nature like someone committing suicide or a boy/girl friend having an affair, and you end up seeing the world and all of it's faults.

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on Sep. 26 2015 at 1:58 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

I'm not sure, but this sounds like one of those good girl gone bad things. I like it, good poem, and this makes my 3rd poem :) thx for sharing

on Jan. 8 2014 at 10:57 pm
author_musical PLATINUM, Torrington, Wyoming
27 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sweetie, if you're going to be two faced, at least make one of them pretty. - Marilyn Monroe

This is in response to one of your forums... Anyway I already posted my thoughts! :)

asofnow GOLD said...
on Jan. 7 2014 at 7:44 pm
asofnow GOLD, Troy, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing gold can stay ~ Robert Frost

The poem was beautiful. But I would like it a lot more if you elaborated on the poem instead of just coming out and saying "sin".
I feel like more imagery would be necessary given the topic of the poem.

on Jan. 7 2014 at 7:02 pm
BandGeekAndProud PLATINUM, Burlington, Massachusetts
23 articles 0 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination is more important than knowledge."
Albert Einstein

Okay, so this whole poem is very simplistic and fragmented, and I know that that's a style thing, but I woul have added words like "innocence once flew" and "now clipped and maimed." I got it, but it was a bit unclear, and I had to pause, pulling me out of the mindset of the poem. Also, just a personal preference thing, I don't like telling people what my poems symbolize in the author's note. I feel like it defeats the purpose of looking deeper into the poem, you know?

on Jan. 3 2014 at 8:14 pm SILVER, Newburgh, New York
7 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who gives me strength." Philippians 4:13

"Perspective is a lovely hand to hold." -Matthew Thiessen

This is really short, but somehow beautifully gets the point across in a striking way.  Keep up the good work!! If you could check out my poem "The Self-Proclaimed Architect" that would be awesome!

on Dec. 21 2013 at 7:21 am
carolineklepper SILVER, Tappan, New York
8 articles 5 photos 10 comments
You are an awesome writer. I love this. Short but with so much significance.

on Dec. 12 2013 at 8:44 pm
jennag4 PLATINUM, New City, New York
27 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I write to be the characters that I'm not.

reaaly really good and short to so it gets the message acfross really easily  

on Dec. 12 2013 at 12:41 am
MeganLamberger BRONZE, Beaverton, Oregon
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Just Keep Swimming"

Hey I really love this!  You did and amazing job, especially with your diction. Crazy good!

on Dec. 9 2013 at 11:00 pm
author_musical PLATINUM, Torrington, Wyoming
27 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sweetie, if you're going to be two faced, at least make one of them pretty. - Marilyn Monroe

Great poem. It's a little dark, but so are mine. I love the way it invokes the image of wings. That image is so powerful in poetry, because in our life we go through many sets of wings. Love it!

Blynn SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2013 at 7:03 pm
Blynn SILVER, Waco, Texas
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Wow. I dont know why this isn;t published or editor chosen. This is really good. Love the message, we don't truly grow up until our innocense is washed away. It's not the word choice and construction per se that make this a great poem but also the structure and tiny details. *High five*