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Invincible Summer

August 2, 2013
By LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

I’ve a silk blouse that falls
so gently over my thighs
and a coffee mug you bought.
In faded and defeated letters
it reads, ‘Invincible summer.’
Summer, though, is no longer and
I’ve never known a winter so cold.
So here I sit and think of a
halcyon time by the ocean
where we found a conch shell.
Together we painted it the colors
of a soft horizon glow
where it’s as if gripping hold of fire
and feeling a fuzzy velvet.
I use it as a paperweight
to hold down photos of us
and as a telephone to here your voice;
your tone like whispers of the sea.
Next to a photo of two lovers
laughing with the waves
is our half assembled puzzle
that takes me to a time
I wish I never knew:
Patiently lifting small pieces
they fall from your delicate hands
and as the snow begins to trickle
like ashes of a cigarette
you, too, slowly hit the ground.
Your intentions were gold;
taking the medication to get better.
But your motivation wasn’t as bright;
for you, I didn’t try hard enough.
My invincible summer
was taken away by a winter storm.
So I’ll try to shut my eyes
that see best when closed,
just promise that while I dream
you’ll sing to me sweet.
For when my eyelids open
I’ll slowly walk to the sea
and there I’ll let the waves take me.
We’ll prove that together
we’re invincible.

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This article has 13 comments.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 15 2013 at 4:13 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I adore this poem because I adore the summer. It reminded me a lot about "Summertime Sadness" by none other than Lana Del Rey. I like the simile of the cigarette ashes. The beginning with the blouse and coffee (coffee high five) made the poem feel homey. Love it. 

on Sep. 5 2013 at 10:49 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

LEXUS! Okay so please don't be mad if I begin to describe how much I liked this line by line. Here goes: The first few lines were totally captivating and made me want to read more, your imagery is SO vivid that I can see this movie going in my head. Literally. No kidding. The lines that say "Together we painted it the colors of a soft horizon glow" : EPIC. I love the intimacy of the meaning of these words. Then "I use it as a paperweight to hold down photos.... " WOW, This is just so uncontrived, it also seems as if this poem has descended upon you or something :P Then oh, I think you meant "hear" and not "here" by the way. In the next few lines all the similies and metaphors and the way through, ingenious and spectacular,, I love the fact that this poem makes one feel so close to the vantage point and actually feel the story (which gets more gripping now)  Then the climax, the story twists and with "I didn't try hard enough" I cannot understand what happened, but something sad and inevitable obviously. Was medication a metaphhor for something else? The last few lines were just so adorable. Amazing job on this one. You never cease  to amaze me. :) 

midnightwoah said...
on Sep. 1 2013 at 8:27 pm
midnightwoah, Monett, Missouri
0 articles 0 photos 188 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We accept the love we think we deserve." -Stephen Chbosky

Love your use of imagrey, i could imagine a adolecent girl in the entire story. My favorite was how you compared to ashes of a cigiratee, very decriptive! Love it and great picture to go by it!

on Aug. 19 2013 at 10:42 am
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

That was such a great poem and such a beautiufl story. I loved the imagery and the story and the word choice was excellent. I loved the lines "My invincible summer was taken away by a winter storm." and "as the now begins to trickle like ashes of a cigarette"  You never think of snow and cigarettes going together, but here it works. Very well, I might add. Great job! Keep writing! 

on Aug. 18 2013 at 8:52 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Lets try this comment thing again. OMG THIS IS SO FRIKIN GOOD WHERE THE FLUFF IS THE EDITORS CHOICE!! Ahem. 'Scuse the caps, i was a little overworked ;) Well Lexus, you certainly have done it again; created a frikin amazing poem that not only entertains, has a point, and is well written, but makes me wonder how you didn't get an editors choice for this! CMON EDITORS!!! Anywho. I used some of the lines in here as my new fav quote on my profile. I won't tell you wich lines, that you will have to find out on your own :) Anyhow, i think this is AWESOME. Your AWESOME. Your work is AWESOME . And I am stuck here banging my head into a wall for inspiration. I litteraly have not written anything in nearly like two months! I am having such extreme writers block that i contemplated quiting writing! jealous gurl. Well, keep rockin. And come to New York so i can steal some of your amazing talent ;) p.s. i favorites this :)

BlottedInk said...
on Aug. 18 2013 at 3:44 pm
BlottedInk, Searsmont, Maine
0 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most wasted day of all is that on which we have not laughed." -Nicholas Chamfort

this is such a beautiful story :) i love how you made the reader feel the two characters relationship. and i love how the shell is a telephone to the person's voice! ive always been fascinated by the sea, so this poem is really special <3  

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Aug. 17 2013 at 7:45 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

wow, this is brilliant! How you seem to come up with such gorgeous and picture-painting scenes is beyond my comprehension, but I love it! I love the romance and exquisite descriptions- everything about it screams I'M AN AWESOME WRITER! haha, elegently written-- Amazing job.

JB.313 said...
on Aug. 17 2013 at 4:20 pm
JB.313, Rome, Other
0 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
As I look back on my life, I realize that every time I thought I was being rejected from something good; I was actually being re-directed to something better.

wow,you are a really great poet.i appreciate such kind of writing in such young was so touching and i love it.

on Aug. 17 2013 at 3:39 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

You're romantic poems have always caught my eye and heart. They are so moving and poignant. This one is a fine example of that. It gave me a big smile and also brought some tears. I've always wondered, is this based on someone in your life? Anyways, I love the structure and the imagery like always- you always improve everytime i read your works. I love it and I highly suggest you write a novel. You could pretty much be the female Nicholas Sparks of poetry! Kudos to you for creating a masterpiece!

on Aug. 15 2013 at 3:27 pm
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
60 articles 11 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Oh! Ps. I found a type-o. Something about a telephone so I could hear you voice.

on Aug. 15 2013 at 3:26 pm
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
60 articles 11 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

You're a great poet and a great story teller. Have you ever concidered writing stories?

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 15 2013 at 10:43 am
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
1 article 0 photos 405 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

i love this! its kind of bittersweet. it just made me smile. my favorite part was when you said how you've never known a winter so cold. beautiful

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on Aug. 15 2013 at 10:30 am
Wow..!! Your way to describe is really nice.. Keep writing dear :)