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June 27, 2013
By meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
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it's strange because i never liked the color
brown, but as i gaze into your eyes, i can't help but fall irrevocably
in love with the creamy, smooth, rich color
of mocha coffee, and i hesitate in
turning away
from you, because i don't know
if i can function completely without
the caffeine that is your eyes



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desolait said...
on Jul. 6 2013 at 3:26 pm
This poem is just so great, totally in love with it

kaity said...
on Jul. 6 2013 at 2:20 am
Aww what a sweet poem! I love how you compared brown eyes to mocha coffee, that's just great! :)

on Jul. 6 2013 at 2:10 am
I love this omg

ndulek said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 10:35 pm
I love this so much. Especially because i love coffee

amanda s said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 10:31 pm
This poem is absolutely beautiful and I think it uses words that are hard to find for that person you love.

Annie said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 10:31 pm
Amazing! She should definitely be published!

alexislala22 said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 9:00 pm
This poem is really beautiful & her writings are eloquently written. I hope to continue reading more. :) 

on Jul. 5 2013 at 8:00 pm
lovely. :) 

noorchadha said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 6:02 pm
I love the coffee metaphor. It works beautifully in this poem, starting with the use of the color imagery, and especially with the description of the "caffeine that is your eyes." That last line really brings the poem together, I love it. 

heartnghiem said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 4:29 pm
Oh my god I fell in love with this poem as soon as I read it. Sweet and simple.

on Jul. 5 2013 at 4:24 pm
this makes me feel like im in some coffee shop with a mysterious attractive guy omg and the smell of coffee and is everywhereee i love it!

on Jul. 5 2013 at 3:53 pm
i love the comparison, it gives such a warm feeling...

ass-butt said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 3:42 pm
Awsome pome this touches me on a deep emotional level

on Jul. 5 2013 at 3:26 pm
This poem is so wonderful especially because she starts with saying how she doesn't like the color of his eyes but in the end admits she loves them

Katherine said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 3:24 pm
This is amazing I love this and I can relate to it. Great job!! :D

carlee_315 said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 3:23 pm
LOVE the metaphor with the caffeine and brown eyes. AHHHHHH! This is perfectly written in my mind.

Terry1399 said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 2:36 pm
Your poetry is amazing! 'i cant function completly without the caffeine that is your eyes'. that line just hits me so hard. beautiful... just beautiful. 

on Jul. 5 2013 at 2:06 pm
So proud of you au-rev0ir this is a great poem 

caroackles said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 2:03 pm
Perfect! Go on with writing, you are really talented.

Daisygrace said...
on Jul. 5 2013 at 1:49 pm
wow. This is so true in my situation! I love it!