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Before the Important Game

April 27, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments

Sitting on the bench before the important match
A rapidly racing, rambling heart
A stomach filled with sickening strange butterflies
Shaking, sweaty hands
A mind analyzing the most awful alternatives
The thought of failing
The eyes of the whole audience
Focused our your team
And on you

The sickening sense grows and swells
As the time to my entrance onto the court
Is tampered with every tick- tock of the clock
My nervousness is like a monster
Devouring me from inside
My nervousness is like a ticking bomb
Ready to make my courage detonate
Into a hundred maybe a thousand petite pieces

Harbouring my head in my hands
I inhale deeply and exhale noisily
I close my eyes and take a second
To prepare myself for going out there

The buzzer bombinates blatantly
Reminding me that my quarter is about to begin
It mocks my abstract anxiety of the absolute defeat
With my legs trembling I step out to the center
One more bottomless breath
No more time to waste
I face my adversary
I focus on the ball
The game begins



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on May. 21 2013 at 4:52 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D :D 

on May. 20 2013 at 8:48 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"

Not a word of suggestion! Very relatable, easy flow, just great job!

on May. 15 2013 at 5:50 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :)

on May. 15 2013 at 5:35 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D

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on May. 15 2013 at 2:55 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Love this! Bombinates—awesome word. Need to use that one in the future. I felt the emotion and momentum building up as each stanza passed. I felt what you wanted to portray. And I enjoyed reading this. Good poem.

on May. 11 2013 at 12:47 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :)

on May. 10 2013 at 8:31 pm
jmitchbb SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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I love it ,especially the 2nd part of the second stanza! My nervousness is like a monster/Devouring me from inside/My nervousness is like a ticking bomb/ Ready to make my courage detonate. Great job!

on May. 10 2013 at 6:37 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 2:05 pm
Someone2know BRONZE, Council Bluffs, Iowa
4 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont let your insecurities ruin the beauty you were born with.(:

Wow!!! This is soooo amazing I absolutely love it!! :) Your word choice is phenominal and its easy for me to relate to! I actually felt like I was the person in the poem.. I think I actually got butterflies in my stomach..! This poem was great.! Keep up the good work!!! :)

on May. 9 2013 at 12:56 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 12:56 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 12:55 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Wordnerd54, thank you so much for the helpful feedbakc. :) 

on May. 9 2013 at 12:54 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much TheEpic95. :) It really means a lot to me that you liked it. 

on May. 9 2013 at 12:33 pm
Draco_Shadowfire GOLD, Casa Grande, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"i have not failed i just found 100,000 ways that do not work"-->Albert Einstein

i like it because it tells how you feel when you are nervous or other things

on May. 9 2013 at 1:04 am
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

Oh God, this poem actually made me nervous! (I remember feeling this way before a game all the time.) Great job! I love the frantic rhythm of the poem - how it's rushed to coincide with the speaker's nervousness.  Very detailed and vivid descriptions as well. The only thing I'd work on is the third stanza - it seemed just sort of "thrown in there" in comparison to the rest of the poem (the others seemed more intricate and had more carefully chosen words.)  And I mean, that's really nitpicking, just for the sake of improvement - it's an awesome poem, regardless.  Nice job!

on May. 8 2013 at 11:08 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Wow! I could feel the anxiety, the restlesness in this one. The only thing that seemed to stick out oddly was the first line of the final stanza, that was odd. I had to read it a few times before i undrstood it. The rest i love, you really captured the feel of suspence that comes with the waiting in basketball, or any compitition, really. The second stanza was, i belive, the best, and its last few lines especially. Great work!

on May. 7 2013 at 11:32 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
I'm so glad that you liked it. :) Thank you   

on May. 7 2013 at 11:30 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much, mollybug13. :) 

on May. 6 2013 at 9:38 pm
Mollybug16 BRONZE, Cleveland, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 120 comments

Favorite Quote:
Impossible is not a word, it's just a reason for someone not to try.

I love this the description felt so real. 5/5

on May. 6 2013 at 3:08 pm
Rolledthestone SILVER, Nowhere, Other
8 articles 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You hypocrite, first take the plank out of your own eye, and then you will see clearly to remove the speck from your brother’s eye." (Matthew 7:5) and "All the poeple who supported slavery were free, all the people who support abortion live..."

Well, everyone elses comments pretty much cover it. It was a great peice of work, 5/5!