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Sun and Moon

February 10, 2013
By SteelersJdog GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
SteelersJdog GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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The sun and moon are masters of deception
They specialize in fanatical faking
Astrological hypocrites
With a smirk on their faces

The sun begins its dishonest occupation
By shining as gold in the morning sky
Warming the faces of innocent children
Only to mask its dark secret

For in the night, the sun puts on an evening gown
One as dark as coal and as malevolent as death
It bathes in clubs and casinos
And it lavishes those who gratify themselves

The moon commences its evil plot
By shunning its face in mornings light
Ashamed of its past and afraid of its future
It hides and runs from its nuisance

In the night, the moon wipes its tears
It dresses in a gown as white as snow
Nothing to be embarrassed by
No mistakes to conceal from man’s eyes

Yet both the sun and the moon are not as they are
For the moon is not really white as snow
And the sun is not really as bright as gold
Both deceivers living in a deceived world

The author's comments:
Our society has become accustomed to putting on a mask to look like what others want us to look like.

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This article has 4 comments.

on Mar. 5 2013 at 2:30 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I love this, it's really well done!

on Feb. 26 2013 at 9:27 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

I don't think I understand it, but I like it. I don't get the whole deceit thing except that you state there is deceit. I like the show not tell thing, and while you do that very well, I think you explain the wrong things for the point you summarize, if that makes sense? I like it, but I don't understand it

on Feb. 25 2013 at 3:55 pm
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

This is great! i like the depth of the poem and your descriptions!

on Feb. 13 2013 at 3:09 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead;
I lift my lids and all is born again.
(I think I made you up inside my head)."
-Sylvia Plath

I love extended metaphores!