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Eating Away this Love
April 14, 2012
You see the cheese cracker in your hand before its consumed. Each bite i take its for you. The hurt knowing you and i will never be the same i cant contain so i try to eat it away. Each bite and chew is the love i once had for you but as i eat away the feelings for you are the same. I eat and eat and gain and gain but each time my heart continues to aches. So explain to me what am i going to do. Sooner or later my heart going to burst with all these feeling i have for you??
© Steve S., Marblehead, MA
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This article has 6 comments.
RandomPoet SILVER said...
on Jan. 19 2013 at 6:51 pm
Thank you this is one of my favorites as well. I just happen to be eating cheese crakers wishing that my crush would notice me when i came up with it. I got over him luckly. But im not going to lie im glad i crushed on this guy most of my best work came out it :)
RandomPoet SILVER said...
on Jan. 16 2013 at 9:20 pm
Thank you. Espically for the advice about the commas and the is. But when i wrote it at the time i was wasnt thinking is i was thing going so after reading it and adding the is it made more sense. :)
XweienX said...
on Jan. 16 2013 at 3:40 am
Great meaning overall. What I would suggest is adding commas where needed or split the poem into lines.
Eg.
Each bite and chew
is the love i once had for you,
but as i eat away,
the feelings for you are same.
Also, i think there is a grammar mistake in the last sentence, "Sooner or later my heart (is) going to burst..."
Still, great job on the poem! :)
Eg.
Each bite and chew
is the love i once had for you,
but as i eat away,
the feelings for you are same.
Also, i think there is a grammar mistake in the last sentence, "Sooner or later my heart (is) going to burst..."
Still, great job on the poem! :)
RandomPoet SILVER said...
on Dec. 12 2012 at 10:14 am
Thank you :)
Rocker_Girl_SilentChaos said...
on Jul. 7 2012 at 8:23 pm
Your writing is really good, you should keep writing :D
