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Mind Tricks

January 13, 2012
By recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."


Life is a game
Girls are the same
That's why she screams
As I dissect her dreams

She calls me a knight
But I'm really a hunter
She's lost her sight
Truly asunder

Girl's feel too much
Yet I feel too little
Playing with hearts
Gosh they're so brittle

I want a strong girl
Who can see through the mist
I say you're beautiful
Resist!

See past my words
Just see the meaning
Tower of cards
Jesus, we're leaning

I see I've just lost you
But look it's okay
You'll see through my madness...

Someday.


The author's comments:
If you don't know what asunder means, you might want to look it up.

Also I'd find it interesting if you stated what you think this is about..

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cookiestar said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 6:56 am
This is a great poem, its well written:). good job!

popo50 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 18 2012 at 11:31 pm
popo50 BRONZE, Yelm, Washington
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i love it sometimes thats how i feel

on Jan. 18 2012 at 6:45 am
poetidea_myworld_22 PLATINUM, Rediville, South Carolina
39 articles 1 photo 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A girl doesn't need anyone who doesn't need her" Marylin Monroe

this is wonderful!!

Phoenix. said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 6:07 am
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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i really like this! Great Job!

.king. SILVER said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:39 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
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Nice poem, I think the word 'Resist' always make me like a poem !

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:41 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

You pretty much nailed it right on the head! :) Way to go! And thanks!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:08 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

Veryyy good! =) i like all the rhyming, and the poem is kind of haunting...i think it's about a relationship where the guy knows he's gonna hurt the girl, but she doesnt; she only sees the good in him, and all the kind words he says...that's why he tells her to "Resist!" idk if i'm right about that but, all and all, great poem! 5/5 =)

on Jan. 16 2012 at 4:15 pm
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

To be honest angel, the word just felt like it should be there. It seemed to flow for me. I'm not sure if it actually goes with the piece but if it doesn't it's funny how people miss it.

on Jan. 16 2012 at 2:51 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

Hey it is truly amazing. And asunder means apart, or split. do u mine me asking why you wrote it?

on Jan. 16 2012 at 10:33 am
vetenari BRONZE, Birmingham, Alabama
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Love the tone.... Keep writing!

TapTap SILVER said...
on Jan. 15 2012 at 6:04 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

luvluvluvluvluv it! awesome point of veiw

KCayla GOLD said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 9:22 pm
KCayla GOLD, Stillwater, New York
12 articles 2 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I brought a cupcake, and I brought Apollo" - My Best friend, implying that I was like Apollo :D

Nice, I like it :)

on Jan. 14 2012 at 8:58 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

AWEOMSE! I hafta say recurring i think this is your best one!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 8:40 am
Wired_To_Inspire PLATINUM, Coopersburg, Pennsylvania
49 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your mind fights the battles, but your heart wins the war." -Liz Ruth

This is reallly good... you should send in more pieces to different sites.

Abby96 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 11:40 pm
Abby96 BRONZE, Leesburg, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 26 comments
Well its not disgustingly romantic... i like it

Snowi BRONZE said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 10:09 pm
Snowi BRONZE, Boise, Idaho
4 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am me deal wit it.

Well, you have an amazing talent.

on Jan. 13 2012 at 9:25 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 141 comments
I love it. It gives such a diffrent Point of virew thats normally not seen.

on Jan. 13 2012 at 9:14 pm
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

IT's awesome I love it man

emilykl BRONZE said...
on Jan. 13 2012 at 8:08 pm
emilykl BRONZE, Eastvale, California
4 articles 1 photo 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Every tear says a thousand words but its up to the bearer what language they speak

wow thats really good!

on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:30 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
32 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

Wow, this is great(: me and you have the same kind of personality