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Broken Perfection
January 3, 2012
Blonde hair and blue eyes,
She looks perfect on the outside.
No one knows how much she strives to be perfect through everyone’s eyes.
Everyone sees only what she wants them to see. It’s what she hides is what worries.
What they don’t know is how she came to be this broken bundle of perfection.
They don’t know how much willpower it took to look like this.
How much it took to starve just for looks.
She is the definition of broken perfection, because all she can see is her reflection.
© Katya K., Westfield, IN
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hippiechick99 GOLD said...
on Apr. 19 2012 at 8:13 am
I know this is true. People used to think I was pretty perfect too, until I started being myself. I don't freak out if I only have 5 minutes to get ready or something anymore. I actually wrote a poem very much like this a couple days ago. I'll post if you want. :)
This is very good! Personally, I would have broken down each line into stanzas, so the rhyming words are more definite. The one stanza I'm not crazy about is "What they don't know is how she came to be this broken bundle of perfection. They don't know how much willpower it took to look like this." Maybe instead write something along the lines of how she is a broken bundle of perfection because she made herself look this way because no one is born a barbie doll. All things considered, this is really good. I love your last line! Nice work :)
Evilgummysattack GOLD said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 5:20 pm
Beautiful, that's all I can say. Delves deeper into the idea of perfection. I love it.
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