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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Feb. 27 2011 at 4:11 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love. <br /> Henry Drummond

This poem has a lot of interesting emotions in it. 

KristieM said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 9:40 am
KristieM, Melbourne, Iowa
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I really liked this piece of writing. I thought it was very clever and had good wording.

amhotopp said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 9:36 am
amhotopp, State Center, Iowa
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you are a very good writer!

freeo said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 8:55 am
freeo, Marshalltown, Iowa
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The poem was good

wesley d said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 8:45 am
wesley d, Shady, Iowa
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nice job....

 


on Feb. 25 2011 at 4:44 am
Ayushi_austen BRONZE, Kolkata, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I love my past. I love my present. I&rsquo;m not ashamed of what I&rsquo;ve had, and I&rsquo;m not sad because I have it no longer...

my thoughts exactly!!write something commendable(like dis 1 )and then we shall see....

teenpoet8 said...
on Feb. 24 2011 at 7:51 pm
Bubblybubbles223 hey listen, i know youre entitled to your opinion and all, but this is a site for constructive criticism, not cruelty.  .  i feel bad for the author of this poem because they do not deserve to put up with what you think is just a harmless opinion.

the.beast said...
on Feb. 24 2011 at 4:38 pm
i never had a dad........i want one like this one!

on Feb. 24 2011 at 2:20 pm
knitwit96 BRONZE, Mt Clemens, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Carry out a random act of kindness, with no expectation of reward, safe in the knowledge that one day someone might do the same for you.<br /> Princess Diana

i really like this poem 

on Feb. 23 2011 at 2:41 pm
That was really good! I wish i had a dad who was cool like yours....?

Grandma BRONZE said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 2:14 pm
Grandma BRONZE, Orange, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
love is a four letter word and if you cannot prove it or mean it than why say it!

yea me too :-(

on Feb. 23 2011 at 12:06 pm
BigJoe92 BRONZE, Bartlett, Illinois
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I wish I had a cool dad :(

foxbox BRONZE said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 10:41 pm
foxbox BRONZE, Hudson, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
For my part I know nothing with any certainty, but the sight of the stars makes me dream.

Cute poem, not my favorite but still enjoyable to read

Annie said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 8:07 am
The comments here are supposed to be on this poem, not to advertise your own work. Also, when I did a search for your screename, you don't even have any work on this website, unless it's anonymous; anyway, my point being-this is not the place to advertise your work.

on Feb. 21 2011 at 5:57 pm
writer500 BRONZE, Putnam, New York
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Hey Guys! Im posting this here because the largest amount of people will probably view it. So, i want to say please check out some of my work i want to know what you think-thanks!!

on Feb. 20 2011 at 7:10 pm
ski_mayday BRONZE, Uhrichsville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
*&quot;A true friend reaches for your hand, and touches your heart.&quot;<br /> *&quot;Forever is composed of nows.&quot; -Emily Dickinson<br /> *&quot;If music be the food of love, then play on.&quot; -William Shakespeare

I guess I would like to know what the other was thinking when they wrote it because I can't figure it out.

evergreen232 said...
on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:46 pm
evergreen232, Portland, Oregon
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Wow. this is a gr8 poem!! keep it up!!! :)

evergreen232 said...
on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:44 pm
evergreen232, Portland, Oregon
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i agree with ya searbear180. i love the poem a lot!

on Feb. 18 2011 at 8:41 pm
KassidyLeigh GOLD, Brewer, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;There are a millions guys who will try to pick you up but only one can sweep you off your feet!&quot; -Emily Illingworth

 love how you can almost picture a story in your head of what is being played out! It really is amazing!

Please check out my poem too!   TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/295514/You-Are-My-Ocean/


preteen11 said...
on Feb. 18 2011 at 8:35 pm
i love your oem daddys womb free verse because it gives me good pleasure and i am visualizing a picture so thanks for that! any comments and questions for me??