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July 6, 2011
By ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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Arms folded to keep herself from falling apart,
she sits, legs swinging and twisted at the ankles,
shoelaces untied.

The tears blur her vision, but she can still see
the untruthful promise of the white coat,
the childish paintings mocking her with innocence.
She curls her legs up to her chest.

Hopeless. The word runs through her brain.
It is a lonely word. A scary word. Its teeth threaten
to chew her up, or worse,
swallow her whole.


The author's comments:
My English teacher liked this enough to submit it to a contest and my school's literary magazine... I'm still not convinced that it's that great. Thoughts?

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on Jan. 1 2012 at 6:40 am
AyeshaMuzaffar BRONZE, Lahore, Other
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I loved it!

on Dec. 12 2011 at 8:28 pm
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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Thanks so much haha! 

on Dec. 12 2011 at 6:31 am
CaptainFabulous GOLD, Gray Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I believe in as many as six impossible things before breakfast" - Lewis Carroll

Great poem, I love the detail of the childs fear;

"Its teeth threaten to chew her up, or worse, swallow her whole."

I deam this poem: Fabulous :D


on Sep. 29 2011 at 3:42 pm
squidzinkpen SILVER, Buffalo, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The Irish gave the Scots the bagpipes as a joke, but the Scots haven't seen the joke yet"- Irish Proverb

I like it a lot! You left it really open for interpretation for the reader, which I really enjoy! It kind of reminds me of the poetry we read in class sometimes. Very nice! I love your diction and the emotion behind the piece, fabulous!

on Sep. 28 2011 at 9:15 pm
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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Thanks for reading it! Much appreciated. 

on Sep. 28 2011 at 9:14 pm
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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oh goodness... I guess I might as well be honest. I was having some problems, and the doctor I went to (the third that week) couldn't help. This happened to coincide with a poetry unit in English class, so when I couldn't come up with anything better, this came out. Random, yes. But I'm okay witn that.

on Sep. 28 2011 at 9:11 pm
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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Oh thank you, I really appreciate it. But what do you mean by editor's choice?

(A bit late in my response, I know. Busy busy busy!)


on Aug. 31 2011 at 7:09 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said “There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.”

Oh, and awesome about the 'Editor's Choice". Looks as if we are not the only ones that think this is an excellent poem:)

on Aug. 31 2011 at 7:08 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said “There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.”

I agree with your english teacher, it is very well written and definately covers a wide range of topics. Well written and overall, excellent job.

on Aug. 31 2011 at 4:10 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck<br /> <br /> In three words i can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost<br /> <br /> Live, Love, Laugh - ______<br /> <br /> Hope, Love, breathe &lt;3 - Me

it's really vague i agree, but mabye thats what makes it good! To be honest its abit random if i may say! where did you get this idea? :)

on Aug. 31 2011 at 12:28 pm
Sorla_the_Space_Cowboy GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Sometimes if you want to see a change for the better, you have to take things into your own hands.&rdquo; - Clint Eastwood<br /> &quot;I never lie. I believe everything I say, so it&#039;s not a lie.&quot; - Mark Wahlberg<br /> &quot;I just want to be pure&quot;- Jim Carroll

I really like how it's vague actually. You wouldn't know what the poem is referring to unless you read the title. It sounds light-hearted like dark humor.