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Lake of solitude

August 4, 2010
By Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran


I lie
Or float
In the center
Of a divinely smooth
And spiritually
Satisfying
Lake
Bathing in the dusk

The water is as light as wind
As it caresses my
Bare skin
With a lover’s touch

While waves gently and rhythmically move me
I feel like I’m taking part in
The silent
And somber
Dance of remotest nature

Blind, the back of my body unknowingly
Faces a
Natural basin of
Ancient
Aquatic
And unspoken secrets

Like the melancholy fish that
Stroll through the dregs of the maritime
World

My face is gripped by the vastness of the sky
Those eyes of mine
Take a celestial journey through the
Colorful heavens
That hold no border

The sky above me is
A symphony
The sunset: that unnamed instrument of God
Warm and moving and majestic
The wind a delightful arrangement
Of sacred flutes
The stars the
Heartfelt harp playing of smiling angels

Wrapped in absolute
Calm
With peace on
My mind

Floating in that earthly yet otherworldly scene
I feel like Christ has confided
In me the secret
Of his divine act
As the soles of his feet
Padded across the water of our world


The author's comments:
This was both a metaphor and a blissful experience that I had.

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leafy said...
on Dec. 21 2011 at 2:58 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Another person joins the fan club! :) Ever since I first saw you, even just how you speak, I new you would be an amazing author, I'm completely serious. (Hm I think initially saw you when I was critiquing some of stargirl's work, actually ;) )

Rayne GOLD said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 12:38 am
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
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I love this one. Your poems are so cryptic. Dont stop!

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:40 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Cool. France is very beautiful. :)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 1:39 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

 That's Cool. :)

on Jul. 23 2011 at 11:11 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Ah well, I know many atheists; not having any religion can be really depressing! But there are a few wonderful people who are still able to embrace life to the fullest, and don't regret their atheism. So I guess atheism is what you make of it.

And that's great! The 'Christian bit' was inspired while I heard little splashing noises while floating on a lake and imagine the story of Jesus walking on water.


on Jul. 23 2011 at 11:08 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Wow, you certainly seem to have traveled quite a bit! I hope to go to France one day; and if I'm there, I'll certainly take a stroll along the Atlantic coast. :)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 9:06 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

You know, I was wondering if you believed in God. And I am so glad that I do,(I find atheists extremely depressing)

I myself am Muslim and even though your poem is from the perspective of Christianity, I still really appreciate it. :)


Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 9:02 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

This poem is utter beauty. Love the picture with it too. :)

This is how I feel swimming.

You should go swim at Lake Tahoe. I was just there. Trust me, I've been around the world, and I've ever seen water as clear and beautiful as that. Though the water is extremely cold.

The only places I can compare it to  is the Atlantic coast of France.  


on Jul. 5 2011 at 9:50 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Thank you so very much, Destinee! I'm very glad that you see as much in nature as I do; it's severely underappreciated by humanity as a whole.

I felt like that was probably the only truly strong image in this poem, so I'm glad I incorporated it. Thanks for commenting!


on Jul. 4 2011 at 7:00 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
3 articles 0 photos 303 comments

Favorite Quote:
Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

I love it, and I know the feeling. Sometimes it feels, when I look at nature, that I'm looking at God's craftsmanship. Such perfection. :) 

And I like how you related it to Christ (though I'm not Christian). The last two lines are really powerful. 

on Oct. 30 2010 at 9:33 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

You're welcome stargirl. So you see Raven, one more person added in your fanclub. I suppose that she had become your fan even before me. So wait for some more time and you'll see many more people joining. Best of luck!!  

on Oct. 27 2010 at 8:26 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I've been in your fanclub for quite awhile, ever since I read the first poem of yours.

Thanks for starting the fan club, dove :)


readaholic said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 5:23 pm
Yeah the picture really suits the poem....I find it hard to find a picture that really matches what I'm writting but you seem to have found the perfect match!

on Oct. 8 2010 at 5:48 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I'm flattered by your specific compliment. I hope the picture was an enjoyable to look at.

Thanks and good night... or good morning.


readaholic said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 5:37 pm
This poem is grea-it really flows and paints a picture-no, a masterpiece-in your mind!  Well done!

on Oct. 7 2010 at 4:13 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

(Sigh) I've waited quite a while.

I'd be happy to join your fan club.


on Oct. 7 2010 at 9:42 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

I'm glad that you are happy to start your fan club. I'll bet that you just wait for some time and there'll be many more. ha! Ha! HA!!!! 

on Oct. 6 2010 at 4:43 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Grazie!

And hooray! I've now started my own fan club with one person. I'm forever grateful for your compliments.


on Oct. 6 2010 at 9:59 am
A_shy_dove GOLD, Hubli, Other
10 articles 1 photo 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never compare your life with others, as you have no idea what their journey is all about.

Very nice poem! I'm becoming a fan of yours

on Sep. 20 2010 at 6:36 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I repeat myself an awful lot too :) So don't feel bad about it :)

It does me good that you thank me for being thoughtful :) That's one of those things that I am striving for.