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eggshell

August 11, 2010
By J-blotting-ink SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
J-blotting-ink SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
8 articles 6 photos 20 comments

eggshell
~
paper cannot hold you (‘re)




ex
planation in the same
(wayyouonceheldme) with




out
my skin so much as my
s


o

u

l (which
) you gathered

like the

shattered (pieces) of a rob

(in’s egg)

believe me (i have tried so

many
times) to hold you
~


The author's comments:
This was written during my ee cummings phase. I really love his work. (It's not about ee cummings, though.)

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Lostinbooks said...
on Sep. 6 2010 at 10:41 am
Lostinbooks, Arcadia, California
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No matter what was messed up when it was put on the site, this is awesome.  Really unique - good work!

on Sep. 5 2010 at 11:55 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

On the contrary, I thought the formatting to add to the piece (even if it was not your intended layout). I still love it! I would be delighted if you looked at some of my poems, though they're written in a standard (boring) format.

on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:49 am
J-blotting-ink SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
8 articles 6 photos 20 comments
Thank you. The website messed up some of the formatting. However, this is meant to be a visual poem, where the arrangment of the letters adds to the meaning of the poem. It was inspired by ee cummings, who almost invented the concept. But on the website it turned out funny.

on Sep. 4 2010 at 4:54 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I found this to be a very creative and beautiful poem. The format is a bit strange (which may be worth a 'meh') but it is still very interesting to read. I applaud your work.

on Sep. 3 2010 at 6:15 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

that kinda happens in the format here... it's alright, still reads really well

on Sep. 1 2010 at 10:26 pm
J-blotting-ink SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
8 articles 6 photos 20 comments
Lol...sorta. They messed up the form... it looks weird...meh.

on Sep. 1 2010 at 7:14 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

lovely pic chick! heh heh, my jokes are so eggciting! love it!