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Im loving you!

May 9, 2010
By Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."


Laughters, smiles, hugs, kisses; no longer help free my pain!

I feel lonely all the time, no matter who's around I always feel the same!

Its nobody's fault, I think myself is the one I am to blame..

Im in pain, constantly, I'm saying it its not a shame

feel me, help me, understand me, do it all over again

Be mine, make me yours, Play with me under the drops of rain

Tell me you love me, and mean it, Me, is what you will gain!

Dance with me all night long, hold my hand, and with me get so crazy, lets get insane!

Can I say you mean so much too me, thats why I talk to you, you're the road thats leading my train,

Help me understand who am I? tell me now, Explain!

If this whole world leaves me, Promise me, on my side you'll remain!

.. And I'm telling you this, its not lame!?!

Say it back, and on each other we will maintain

When I truley love you; your desire will run down my vein

I need you, walk me through all this, let your hand be my cane!

I love you, can I say it, Or will you complain??


The author's comments:
NO additional comments, than what my poem states, I hope you like it , tell me your opinion through the comments, Thank you! :))Enjoy my work!

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BurnHem said...
on Nov. 26 2010 at 11:35 am
Yes, I do ! very good! and you're welcome!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 4:44 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Well Im glad you really like my work :) it means a lot to me,, Thank you!

BurnHem said...
on Nov. 22 2010 at 4:17 pm
You definitely have caught my total attention with the lines of your so "effective" poem. I seriously couldn't stop reading it over again. I absolutely love your writing, and I am to read more right after I hit "post comment". Your words flow just as they need to! Beyond wonderful!!  Great meaning!And  Great work!!!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Nov. 15 2010 at 5:37 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you!! :D

Of course Ill as soon as i get a chance to :)


MRose911 GOLD said...
on Nov. 15 2010 at 12:39 am
MRose911 GOLD, Paradise, Utah
17 articles 10 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No boy is worth crying over and the one who is won't make you cry." - Sarah Kane

I love the beginning! Amazing poem! Please check out my work if you get the chance!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Sep. 5 2010 at 11:17 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you!  It's really deep! :)

on Sep. 5 2010 at 9:46 pm
purpleperson BRONZE, Winnipeg, Other
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is the past, tomorrow is the future, today is a gift, that's why it's called the present"
(this isn't my quote...i don't know who wrote it)

I love this poem! the rhyming really enhanced the poem!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Aug. 9 2010 at 9:02 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thanks! I like this one a lot :) :D

on Aug. 9 2010 at 4:46 pm
CrystalDE PLATINUM, Concord, North Carolina
24 articles 197 photos 166 comments
Really creative, i like how you used your rhyming. Interesting!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 9:04 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you!!  that's so sweet!

Ill check them out right away :) Aww, thats awesome, maybe we can publish them at the sametime who knows :)


on Aug. 5 2010 at 7:09 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

wow this is great:) awesome job i really like this!! your a great writer. (you had commented on my work one or two weeks ago and told me when to tell you when my new work was in) so three of my new poems are posted! i hope that you'll check out all of them:) 'true love is when...', "who i used to be', and 'you wouldn't expect' are my new posts! btw i saw that you are writing a book, another thing we have in common!!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 9:34 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you! And it will be my pleasure to check your work :)

sam013 DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 4:35 pm
sam013 DIAMOND, San Diego, California
63 articles 28 photos 33 comments
great work! i love the emotion that is entwined with the beautiful language. check out my work and let me know what you think!

on Jun. 11 2010 at 1:41 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

No promblem! (:

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 11 2010 at 12:46 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you that is so sweet and supportive, I like your work too.. Thanks again! :)

on Jun. 11 2010 at 12:15 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Your very welcome! I love your work and am always excited to read a poem of yours that I havent already! Your a great writer! (:

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 10 2010 at 8:52 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you so much for stopping by :)

on Jun. 10 2010 at 8:22 pm
AMCLRIDCA PLATINUM, CDA, Idaho
31 articles 2 photos 226 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take... but by the moments that take your breath away.

Absolutely Beautiful!! I love it, well done!!! (:

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 7:05 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Thank you!

on Jun. 9 2010 at 5:52 pm
jmsweevils BRONZE, Gibsonia, Pennsylvania
4 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth is the truth. Even if I don't like the truth; it is the truth."

That was soooo emotional...loved it