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Only a Tree Knows

May 9, 2010
By Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"


You can believe the text on the screen
Though, you will never truly understand what happened in the scene
You could memorize the whole book
I know more, in just one look
You can always study the time period or the place
You will never take in the emotion glued to his face
You may know the history
Do you know why?
The grudges?
The emotions?
That made millions dies
Only I know

Eternal bumps and wrinkles cover my torso
My eyes and ears, veiled
My thousands of arms shoot up to the sky
I am eternal life
I will never die

If you only knew
How things came to be
Oh, the boundless battle for liberty
From ink that declared a group, a nation
To not even an ounce of salvation
From families caring so much for each other
To brother versus brother
From bombs that hit, one then two
How selfish this nation grew?



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on Jun. 23 2010 at 4:42 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

thankyou so much!!!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 4:35 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Yea it was really good, I actually enjoed reading it :)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:43 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

thankyou so much!!! thanks for the advice-i justthink my work sounds better with the ryhme.

on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:42 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

wow thanks!! i'm so glad u told me what u liked about it and i will for sure check out some of ur work!!!

Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 20 2010 at 8:10 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I love the title.. The first part is my fav. so from line 1 till line 12.. then lines 14,15, & 17 are good too! I like the whole thing really but those were strong!

 

 Check out my work!


on Jun. 20 2010 at 10:03 am
MargoSwim33 PLATINUM, Richmond, Virginia
20 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
never frown, because someone may have fallen in love with your smile

This was really good. It has a strong message but you don't have to make everything rhyme but it was great. I loved it!

on Jun. 17 2010 at 10:39 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

thankyou so much!!!

Lonleydandy said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 9:04 am
I liked it! I thought that the message was protrayed well even through the word choice that you used! It was great!

on Jun. 6 2010 at 3:39 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

thanks for your advice i would love it if you would read more-i'll read some of urs when i get the chance-thanks!!

on May. 30 2010 at 12:31 am
NorthernWriter, Fargo, North Dakota
0 articles 0 photos 326 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Only dead fish swim with the stream"

 this has a strong message, only not to sound harsh, don't feel the need to rhyme it. you need stronger verbs and adjectives. poetry is concentrated language. instead of "take" try steal, rip, snatch...those are better. the emotion in this is very strong, but don't give a strong message anything less than strong language! keep writing and improving! you'll definitely become a better writer!