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You were right MAG

April 27, 2010
By margierose GOLD, New York, New York
margierose GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 5 photos 24 comments

You once told me
how you loved
the way
you could see your
bruised knees
through worn down soap,
and how
I loved
watching my bruised knees
become as lifeless as
the silk on the gown my mother used to wear.

You once told me
how you loved the way

a mandolin seemed
to open its mouth
and swallow all the stars from the heavens
which was fuel for the sound:
not unlike a quasar.
and I replied
that a mandolin was an instrument, and nothing more

You once told me
how you loved the homeless man on our street corner
and how he always said hello
to strangers
and smiled at each scrap paper person who passed, like they
I told you
that he was probably insane,
and should get a real job

Well, surprisingly
you were the first of us to go

but, to this day, I wish I had told you
before you
descended that staircase
that you

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inkers GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 7:40 pm
inkers GOLD, Midland, Texas
10 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the lamplight gloating o'er him threw his shadow on the floor... and my soul from out that shadow... shall be lifted, nevermore!" - Poe

Wow. This is really powerful, in all of its simplicity. I wish I had a better word to use to describe this, but it's just powerful. Really evokes emotion. Beautiful work. <3

Tanvi_A said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 7:55 pm

on May. 25 2010 at 9:21 pm
oracle-of-nonsense PLATINUM, Winnabow, North Carolina
37 articles 4 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We are born with two incurable diseases -- life, from which we die; and hope, which says maybe death isn’t the end."
- Andrew Greeley

Wow. This poem is really amazing. I like the ending in particular, as sad as it mayb be. Carpe Diem, right?

on May. 19 2010 at 3:42 pm
wefellinLAVA PLATINUM, Copper Cliff, Other
21 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
'you touched my heart, through it's shell'

This really provokes thought.  Would your message kind of be not to take things for granted?

I like this a lot.

on May. 19 2010 at 1:41 pm
timevampire GOLD, Bellville, Ohio
14 articles 0 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Quoting yourself makes you an ass.

This is amazing yet sad. You what I think? I think your my favorite poet on teenink.  Good job!