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Unconsciousness

November 4, 2009
By turboman PLATINUM, Hudson, Massachusetts
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The person who said that nothing was impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.

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An unbearable pain surges through me,
And I collapse to the floor.
The room sways like the sea,
Calling out to me:
Let go.
There is an ominous ringing in my ears.
I can not hold on any longer.

The clock stops ticking.
Despite the horrible pain preceding,
I feel joyous.
A thousand images flash through my vision:
My family,
My friends,
Everyone who I loved.

I woke up feeling calm and relaxed,
Like I had been dreaming for ages.
My family is crowded around me.
The pain came back as suddenly as it had left.

© Alissa F., Marblehead, MA

The author's comments:
Pretty recently, I fainted. This is exactly what I saw. It was like there was a sudden release of energy. It was pretty cool! But I wouldn't like fainting again.
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AinsleyChernek SILVER said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 7:35 pm
AinsleyChernek SILVER, Eatonville, Washington
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This was amazing. Good job :)