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If You Would Let Me Love You

August 6, 2011
By zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
18 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything


Snuggling with your pillow after a hard day
Listening to your favorite song as a way to escape
Relaxing outside when the weather is nice
That chill feeling you have when everything's going right
Just that feeling of comfort and relaxation when the day is through
I bet that's what it would feel like if you would let me hold you

An explosion of emotion like a firework
The blast of joy you get when a plan works
But has the energy you feel when you win a game
Just good feelings and never pain
But also during it you would feel the softness that a teddy bear shows but with the smoothness of a rose too
I bet that's what it would feel if you would let me kiss you

The blast of water when it's a hundred degrees
But with the pain of being stung by a bee
That overly joyed feeling when your heart soars
We're easily hurt by each other but our hearts cant be easily torn
It feels great
But it all depends on the risks I take
But I'd be so into you that I wouldn't know what to do
I bet that's what it would feel like if you would let me love you


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zone7294 GOLD said...
on Aug. 13 2011 at 9:57 pm
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
18 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything

lol I was thinkin the same thing after I submitted it but thanks though.

on Aug. 13 2011 at 9:49 pm
WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
14 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
If ignorance is bliss, why is our country so complicated?

I like it! I think you should consider giving it a little more punctuation and flow; some of the stanzas had lines that were a bit long. But overall it was good.