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Gravity

April 5, 2009
By MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.

The author's comments:
I wrote this to reflect self sabotage

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Nani5 BRONZE said...
on May. 6 2010 at 5:58 pm
Nani5 BRONZE, Old Bridge, New Jersey
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really good poem

on May. 6 2010 at 5:24 pm
decembersun14 PLATINUM, Winchester, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Life sucks. A lot. But you just have to keep on going. No matter what happens. You can never ever give up. You just have to roll with the punches, go with the flow, and always try your best to keep on going <3"

wow very symbolic. it flows kinda funny but it makes it special. i love it and keep writing!

NbR24 said...
on Apr. 24 2010 at 9:18 am
This poem is awesome. You've got talent.

on Apr. 14 2010 at 3:16 pm
RickiCharlie PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I’ve already been to heaven….and after 5 minutes I was like let’s go"

all i can say is amazing =)

Escaped GOLD said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 2:03 pm
Escaped GOLD, Litchfield, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Lets go make daisy chains in the grass, but only if its 74 degrees or above. I would like to fall in love with you." (:

ahmazing

(:


Jtaco95 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:23 pm
Jtaco95, Saugus, Massachusetts
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This really does remind you of self sabotage, in a way describes different events or things we have to go through in our lives

shorty1600 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:09 am
shorty1600, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Great poem!

on Apr. 1 2010 at 5:08 pm
MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
20 articles 0 photos 8 comments
Hey guys, thanks for you're support, it means alot. it gives me reason to keep on writing.

on Mar. 23 2010 at 6:33 pm
HunterGirl_58 GOLD, Los Lunas, New Mexico
11 articles 1 photo 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If this is what it takes to get there. . . . then BRING ON THE PAIN!!!"

WOW. . . Im spechless, it was amazing! This has gotta be my new Fav.!

inspir3d GOLD said...
on Mar. 23 2010 at 4:52 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

Beautiful, really profound, a little dark

I loved it :)

ird13 GOLD said...
on Mar. 23 2010 at 6:50 am
ird13 GOLD, Beachwood, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
1. Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation.
2. You wear a mask for so long, you forget who you were beneath it.
3. You see, madness, as you know, is like gravity, all it takes is a little push.

I really like this, and it actually inspired me to write something so you should check out my work to see when I post it. It will be called "Just Enough"

on Mar. 23 2010 at 6:42 am
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

I am in love with this, this is the one that should be marked #1 top voted. I'm going to show this to my creative writing teacher it's so good!

<):o Ole said...
on Mar. 16 2010 at 10:15 am
this is a phenomenal poem. I wish all of my work could be this good! All in all, a stunning bit of work.

on Mar. 1 2010 at 4:45 pm
Lord_Limitless BRONZE, New Bern, North Carolina
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this poem is awesome! does it have any emotional significance?

on Feb. 7 2010 at 2:35 pm
FondduLac BRONZE, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love somebody, let them go, for if they return, they were always yours. And if they don\\\'t, they never were." -- Khalil Gibran

some of the metaphors are cliche. the last line really pulled things together.

on Nov. 22 2009 at 2:41 pm
By the way its your brotherfromanothermother Mike... fyi >__>

on Nov. 22 2009 at 2:41 pm
I came back and read your poems again, and of course they were awesome. I just love the last line in this poem its so powerful. I love your soul Matt :)

Carol BRONZE said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 8:57 pm
Carol BRONZE, Weslaco, Texas
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Great poem. I loved it. :)

markt332 said...
on Oct. 7 2009 at 6:20 am
this poem is awesome.

on Aug. 13 2009 at 7:12 pm
iLove2write BRONZE, Merced, California
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wow! what an excellent poem! your clear and vivid descriptions make it easy to visualize everything! great job!