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October 30, 2014
By ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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What I feel for a certain person,

What I once wrote was my view.

What I comes in & out of situations

without a warning or a que.

 

What plays on emotion like a playboy,

but as solid as an ice cube pick.

What feels as soft as a pillow,

but when thrown is as hard as a brick.

 

No name can contain the esential feeling,

no words no abbrieviation.

No explaining is needed for no one has an explanation.

 

What Musiqsoulchild and I agree is used by many now in vain,

What compels someone to stay with their sweetheart even in driving rain

 

What is feeling? does it border chemistry, does it border rapport?

Does it make a heart content or loud like a gunshot report?

 

The epitome of what compasion is deemed,

what infatuation is supposed to be.

The life blood in the relation spawned between you and me.

 

The lust for ones attention,

what we feel is worth dubious risk.

What compels someone to fall in love like an endless abbys.

 

It is love, the unexplained emotion of which we all go through,.

Infact, she's the very force that's driving me to you.

 

She's a feeling like no other,

constantly changing like temperature.

She's intoxicatingly sweet but in situations is quick tempered.

 

She's higher than a space shuttle,

more addictive than any drug.

For no item can match the length & potenency of the feeling of mutual love.

© Valcy E., Stony Point, NY

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ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on May. 8 2015 at 12:33 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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XD no problem lol It's fine by me XD thank you for reading lol
passion_poet19 GOLD said...
on May. 7 2015 at 9:06 am
passion_poet19 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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THESE IS GOOD AND A LITTLE DEEP WHICH IS ALSO GOOD. I LOVED IT 100% IT'S CRAZY HOW WE TRY TO FIND MEN/BOYS TO UNDERSTAND WHAT LOVE IS BUT THEY CAN'T OR DON'T AND JUST PLAY US LIKE A FOOL BUT I SEE NOW THAT THEIR ARE A FEW GOOD PEPOLE OUT THERE THAT UNDERSTANDS LIKE YOU. LOL SORRY IF I GOT TO INTO MY FEELINGS BUT GREAT JOB
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 30 2015 at 9:37 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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XD thx. glad u liked it
EttieGH GOLD said...
on Jan. 30 2015 at 4:22 am
EttieGH GOLD, Mbabane, Other
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Ok, this is really good. I love how you explained that Love is basically inexplainable.
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 20 2015 at 11:33 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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IKR kinda like soul therapy.
TaylorWintry DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 19 2015 at 4:07 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Aw yeah, well it's very nice. Isn't it weird how writing can do stuff like that? :P
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 18 2015 at 4:27 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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Thx. This poem was the first I read to my former GF, I guess it's why we were poem buddies as well as intimate souls lol
TaylorWintry DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 18 2015 at 2:36 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Okay, apparently, the rest of my comment is gone, so I'll just continue here... My favorite part about your personification is how you considered love a "she." It made the poem seem more personal to you, I'm sure. I also liked how the stanzas were very formulaic in the beginning, but as you went, you let your heart take a little more control. I always find it so amazing to read something straight from one's heart. Like RayynStorm said, there are quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but those could be solved pretty easily through a few more readovers of your work. Really great quality overall, I'll be looking for more from you!
TaylorWintry DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 18 2015 at 2:33 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Really beautiful. I feel like you really know (your view of) love, inside and out, good and bad. I think the subtle rhyming of your stanzas was my favorite part; I'm a sucker for good rhymes. In addition, your personification of love at the very end is just beautiful.
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 28 2014 at 1:26 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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Thx, glad u liked it
GreekGoddess BRONZE said...
on Dec. 27 2014 at 4:55 pm
GreekGoddess BRONZE, Andover, Connecticut
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I feel like you did I really good job in the beginning of describing love and ensnaring the reader. However you had a system going (saying what love is) and then you broke it with stanzas that didn't have enough emphasize to be worth it. The stanza about what feeling is didn't feel connected o the rest of the poem, like you went off on a tangent. Otherwise this is really good, you did a great job of getting the emotion across. :)
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 7 2014 at 10:31 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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that's cool
SpringRayyn PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 7 2014 at 4:15 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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I gave it a rating of 3 stars for the reasons I described above.
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2014 at 3:18 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don&#039;t acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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well I thank for your reply. I messed up some spelling and put a few words that weren't supposed to be there. Anyway, you didn't say if you liked it or not :)
SpringRayyn PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 6 2014 at 11:33 am
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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&quot;Don&#039;t punish yourself,&quot; she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing.&quot;<br /> --Markus Zusak, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

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Some of the words and phrasing in your first stanza are used wrong or just confusing. The rest of the poem uses good rhyme (lots of slant rhyme) and imagery. I think if you had used fewer metaphors and/or more emotion in the metaphors it would get across more of the feelings of love that you're describing.
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 5 2014 at 3:12 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don&#039;t acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

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thank you. It really helps to know u like it. I'll rate one of yours too :)
Auji2029 said...
on Nov. 5 2014 at 8:14 am
Auji2029, Flower Mound, Texas
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Okay, I don't write poetry, but this is Really Really good!