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The Distance

May 19, 2014
By ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Keep calm and swim on.


Looking at the time,
you don't feel so far away.
But in my heart,
I know the distance
is not okay.
It is tearing us apart!



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on May. 24 2014 at 8:10 pm
ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Keep calm and swim on.

I am as well, perhaps it will come to  me in a dream.

on May. 24 2014 at 4:52 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Looking forward to the results :)

on May. 23 2014 at 7:00 pm
ashlynn17 SILVER, Alice, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Keep calm and swim on.

I have been trying to work o. The ending

on May. 23 2014 at 4:29 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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I really like the passion in this up until 'is not okay' because the word okay seems a bit lame and the ending seems a bit abrupt and forced. Maybe you could lengthen it? I still like the simplicity in this. Keep writing!