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No Way

January 12, 2012
By n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur


No pain to cry over-no tears to fall,
Their life is over but that's not all,
They're left alone and afraid
Only to regret the choices they've made.

No way to re-trace the paths of before,
No way to change not ending the war-
The war that raged inside their soul
Caused by something they'll never know,
Never settled completely because of a thing called death-
No way to ever take another breath.

Now they're left for all eternity
Only to regret not being the best they could be,
Alone with only their soul and feelings-
And not even privileged to have a heart beating;
Instead it's sorrow and pain without liberty
And tears bottled up that'll never fall free.


The author's comments:
I use to sit and think back on life only to regret just about everything I've ever done. This poem I wrote from the perspective of a 'dead man' and how if they could re-live they'd probably change a lot. But the reality of it is this:they can't...

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on Jan. 31 2012 at 7:14 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you! It took a while to get the present tense to fit in with the fact this is the person of the past...but the perspective was kind of fun and interesting to write from.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 7:02 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

This is just a great poem. Interesting idea, and you do a good job from that perspective. Awesome :)

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:49 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Yes i believe you hit the nail right on the head with that one!:P and actually i have read that poem i believe i commented but ill check out some of you others for sure!

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on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:45 pm
Shmelmo GOLD, Elma, Iowa
16 articles 9 photos 143 comments

Favorite Quote:
You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.

I really like your perspective on this poem. It is very cool. I think it will make people realize that they should live life to the fullest and not to have any regrets. Really nice job! Could you check out my poem - Once a Survivor, Forever a Fighter?

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:44 pm
hotshot PLATINUM, North Sioux City, South Dakota
27 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go confidently in the direction of your dreams. Live the life you have imagined.
Henry David Thoreau

your welcome :) and thank you

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:43 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Yes i have I love that song! Its great...and yeah i kind of does!:)

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:35 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you! And very constructive criticism i love it! Yea, I actually use to dwell on the past too much then i realized there's nothing to be done to it and there nothing that it can do to you other than haunt your memories but why let it? I wrote this poem at the time of when i was regretting alot but now when I read this I know i shouldn't regret and its people like you who remind me im not alone thank you!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:23 pm
hotshot PLATINUM, North Sioux City, South Dakota
27 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go confidently in the direction of your dreams. Live the life you have imagined.
Henry David Thoreau

well done :) the ideas and thoughts corsed through it very easily as it should. you set up the stage, you made the story come alive, and you turned every one person into a true character in your writting. i saw the different personalities and the different actions they could make. great job :) 5/5. but what i would do is not dwell on the past even if it hurts you, but use those feelings in your writting. and always remember that your not alone and that will make your writting even ore remarkable

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:14 pm
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
28 articles 13 photos 66 comments
ohhhhh, have you ever heard the song, "Gone" by Switchfoot? I LOVE it! and it totally goes with what you just said.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:10 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

very true...although this isn't written from my view lol it's suppose to be the thoughts of a 'dead man' and although dead men can't think back like this poem insinuates it's suppose to show people to live there lives so one day they won't regret certain things.

on Jan. 31 2012 at 11:30 am
Choosing2Live4Christ PLATINUM, Wausaukee, Wisconsin
28 articles 13 photos 66 comments
I love your rhyming! it is very good :) 5/5 but you shouldn't look back and regret. you should look forward and make choices that you will be able to look back on and smile at. :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 5:47 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Awesome club soccer is intense and yeah you got to be like beast at soccer lol...thats super cool!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 7:31 pm
denifelice SILVER, Flourtown, Pennsylvania
6 articles 15 photos 149 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are far, far better things ahead than any we leave behind." -C.S. Lewis

I do too but I don't think I'll be good enough. And one of my good friends is homeschooled, and she does club soccer. She's like a pro, she beats like all the SENIORS on the VARSITY team.

on Jan. 29 2012 at 6:38 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

yeah same here...i hope to play for a college team either University of North Carolina or Western Carolina University...the only junk thing is im home-schooled so i dont have a sport records...

on Jan. 29 2012 at 5:37 pm
denifelice SILVER, Flourtown, Pennsylvania
6 articles 15 photos 149 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are far, far better things ahead than any we leave behind." -C.S. Lewis

Same, but I really like both the suspense of offense and the pressure of defense, so mid-field's my ideal spot. (:

on Jan. 29 2012 at 5:11 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

I play for a rec team so im put whatevers needed at the time...but i like playing mid-defense or forward though i dont hate defense...lol i like gk but in real game speed my reflexes arent quick enough:P

on Jan. 29 2012 at 5:08 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

Thank you! appreciate you reading it and commenting:)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 3:13 pm
gossimergrrl BRONZE, Grosse Ile, Michigan
3 articles 1 photo 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hamlet: Oh God, I could be bounded in a nutshell and count myself a king of infinite space, were it not that I have bad dreams." -William Shakespeare

Powerful. Good job.

on Jan. 28 2012 at 8:31 pm
denifelice SILVER, Flourtown, Pennsylvania
6 articles 15 photos 149 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are far, far better things ahead than any we leave behind." -C.S. Lewis

Mhmmmm, I play striker and midfield. You? (:

on Jan. 28 2012 at 8:08 pm
n3xtusplaya DIAMOND, Honolulu, Hawaii
83 articles 23 photos 232 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's better to be hated for who you are than to be loved for what you are not."





~Luara Moncur

yeah i saw that on your profile and was going to mention that! i LOVE soccer!! do you play for school:)