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Slowly Fade Away

August 13, 2011
By sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."


The fire burns high and bright
It keeps the men safe and warm
Orange and red shadows all around
Smoke fills the air with clouds of grey

It keeps the men safe and warm
Protecting them from sleepless beasts
Smoke fills the air with clouds of grey
Unknowingly, they sleep, slowly dying

Protecting them from sleepless beasts
Who rule the night with an iron grasp
Unknowingly, they sleep, slowly dying
From a creature of their own making

Who rules the night with an iron grasp?
Not the men with their soft hides, hunted
From a creature of their own making
No physical form, but a deadly breath

Not the men with their soft hides, hunted
But it’s the air itself that they inhale
With no physical form, but a deadly breath
They slowly fade away

It’s the air itself that they inhale
Orange and red shadows all around
They slowly fade away
And the fire burns high and bright


The author's comments:
Hello! this is just a pantoum i tried for my first time and i just wrote about one of the most basic things; fire! :)

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on Dec. 22 2011 at 10:21 am
lucygirl26 GOLD, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is like a bowl of spaghetti. Every once in a while, you get a meatball." - Sharon Creech

Wow. This was really cool. I LOVED your description. I could picture the fire perfectly. I thought that was SO COOL when you repeated the lines like that, and it turned out very nicely! I love how it's like going in a circle while reading this. Great job!